O' My Stars

the fewtch

galactic belched air
leaky heaven
a wet wet dead
new enamel cave
hanged stunk
for our seconds
helping

The Very Breath Of The Lord
is a sour wine metal song.

put back on
all that weight
you lost, baby.

I love U too death

Reviews

[Wendy Sue]

The last line.
I love U too death

Made me smile, which I realize is a bit twisted but I embrace it.

Very nice piece for me to ponder your thinking.
Thank you

[Speaking Sandclocks]

Brief. Powerful. Well done. :)

[Sydney]

"galactic bleached air" gave me chills. I love your imagery so much

[The Twin Arenas]

"galactic bleached air" is all you. Wish I'd thought of that.

[Sydney]

Oh wow, I really read that as bleached! How funny. I might be dyslexic but maybe it's for the good ;D I don't mind if you steal my line, it's all yours mate :)

[Cheyenne Williams]

I dunno what I was expecting when I clicked on this, but it's everything and more. Cool, man

[Meraki]

It's interesting to say I understood it would be a lie beyond lies but it did make me think of the Crab Nebula. Nice.

[Ana D S M]

Neat piece of writing........

[The Twin Arenas]

thanks for reading

[Ana D S M]

You're welcome.

[Moonie]

I would pretend I completely understood that!! Lol. I love "The Very Breath Of The Lord
is a sour wine metal song." Your poetry is always unique.

[The Twin Arenas]

it's about the big bang, I guess. how we so tiny and stinking and hangin' like burps.

[Moonie]

I thought it was about a couple in a relationship who kept on praying to the lord(or wishing on the stars) to make their relationship work, yet cursed the universe for giving them all the sadness that they faced, calling it unpretty like a stinking and hanging burp I guess, and in the end they decided that they had to accept whatever was on their plate.
It's kinda like when we are kids and we are given some specific crayons, we always crave for the ones we don't have, and if our art work is no good(because we were too busy complaining) we hold the one who distributed them responsible, but when we truly grow up we learn to accept our mistakes.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

"The Very Breath Of The Lord
is a sour wine metal song."
LOL...interesting analogy. I can't help but titter.

[Gummy.G]

"is a source wine metal song" You are so experimental, it's grand. This is smooth.... I like it.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Too experimental for my taste, but very well written. :) Rudi