Former Soldiers/Ex-Cops World Series Game #1

heartbreak=death

It's easy to believe

you're winning

when everything misses.

The sound of a bullet

killing a hill

reminds me of baseball.

MO

Author's Note

Enjoy the big game!

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

In many ways it reminds me of that middle aged man who remembers his last big game or conflict. Louds of emotion in so many words. Nice and I hope to read more.

[The Twin Arenas]

thanks man.

[The Twin Arenas]

yeah. it's about that cop who shot Michael Brown, loosely.

[Matching Socks]

Wow! Great comparison!
Nice job Mister.

[Meraki]

I don't know what sort of poem this is, I'm not even sure I fully understand it but I do know that I like it.

[The Twin Arenas]

as long as you feel something. i use pretty bold big strokes. supposed to be life distilled, I guess. that's what someone said once. anyway, thanks for reading.

[Gummy.G]

You really know how to distract and compare. Two complete separate things, once I read the last line, the sound of a baseball crunching against a the forces of velocity and sound to a ball, just immediately... WOW.
P.S, you are a fantastic writer

[Green]

An interesting comparison, and not really one I would have thought of seeing as I never have been nor plan to involve myself in a war. Well done.

[The Twin Arenas]

thanks, greeners.

[Chadvonswan]

Once I played baseball with a bat and a gun. He fired the screamer and I swung and it put a damn penny hole in the good ol slugger . . ::::::

[Laura Lynn]

I don't know what type of poem this is, but style and form are intriguing here and I feel just now that I would like to read more like it.

[The Twin Arenas]

ha, thanks. that's exactly how I feel about your stuff. thanks.

[Alma W. Reis]

Very plain an true statement in the first stanza. I'm afraid you lost me on the second since I know almost nothing about baseball. But the metaphoric expression "The sound of a bullet/killing a hill" is very enjoyable.

[The Twin Arenas]

thanks L.P
I don't know much about baseball, either. I wish I knew more.
I know a lot of people pay attention to it.

[Coyote Poetry]

War and baseball. Two different places. I know baseball is alive and well in K.C. Here in Detroit. We wish we had a baseball game to observe.
Coyote

[The Twin Arenas]

lots of things alive and well in Missouri tonight, for better or worse.

[Lyn Anderson]

Hmm. Seems we have issues with baseball as well as football. Nicely done.

[The Twin Arenas]

issues and in love with everything.