Former Soldiers/Ex-Cops World Series Game #1

heartbreak=death

It's easy to believe

you're winning

when everything misses.

The sound of a bullet

killing a hill

reminds me of baseball.

MO

Author's Note

Enjoy the big game!

Reviews

[Tania]

Simply written in an amazing way !
beautiful ..
_Beyourself

[Olivia]

I like the comparison you made in this poem. Short and sweet

[Terpsichore]

The bullet might miss, but the experience impacts the bullseye every time. T

[Alessander]

Having played baseball, I know what it feels like to have a 90mph fast ball whiz by my head, and if that's a lil scary, I can imagine a bullet!

Very unique comparison, and visceral.
Good stufF.

Also liked the compactness of it. No fluff.

[RileyRedding]

An unlikely comparison to say the least.
That being said it's simplistic, profound, and flows well.
What more can you ask for. Period.

[Chloe Grant]

Wow, that was amazing. I love the comparison. It's such a short piece but really makes an impact. Great job.

[ZackOfBridge]

killing a hill, must be a pretty big bullet or a very small hill. Makes me wonder.

[Moonie]

Oh my god, that is brilliant writing! The first paragraph gives the impression of a game and then you turn it around with just one line and compare it to a game!!!! WOW! :))

[The Twin Arenas]

Glad you liked it. Thanks.

[Crusty Pizza Stain]

I thought this was about Abe Lincoln. Maybe I don't understand poetry.

[The Twin Arenas]

Abe Lincoln is pretty close. I'll take it.

[Baby Ricochet]

To me it's Eggshells cause that's what your head feels like when the bullets are coming at you.