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People get into Pittsburgh thinking

they'll just take the place. 

They don't think it before, and

they don't think it after they're gone.

Just getting in.

Three days in the rain

and three more before you got here

and people always just backing up

to give it to something.

Don't expect to expect 

much out of Pittsburgh

and then don't expect to

feel it unexpected when it's exactly

what was expected.

Tell anyone anything

in Pittsburgh and

they'll say, "Holy s**t!"

The city just loves a crisis.

I want to see you again.

I miss you.

I miss waking up.

Pittsburgh smells like a beautiful woman

who smells like trash.

I couldn't keep my hands off your

a*s in the morning.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

This is a good description of a city.
"Pittsburgh smells like a beautiful woman
who smells like trash.
I couldn't keep my hands off your
a*s in the morning."
I liked the complete poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[The Twin Arenas]

Thanks. This is one of my favourites. For awhile I was playing baseball every night, and it was during that time I wrote this piece. I had so much clear air in my lungs. Thanks for the read.

[Coyote Poetry]

My pleasure to read your work and you are welcome.

[Love Nik]

That's pretty good. I guess I'll have to see Pittsburgh for myself.

[The Twin Arenas]

ya, me too.

[faryn wolff]

goddamn good.
you hear me?

[Susie]

The last stance, while metaphoric, ties the rest together. Wow.

Have you ever heard of Haruki Murakami? He is a VERY FAMOUS Japanese author. I don't know a lot about him but he writes a lot like you - kind of mentions different things in life and lets the reader make their own connections. It is SO clever.

If you aren't already published, you should be. Respect! x

[The Twin Arenas]

we should all be rich, guys.

[Crusty Pizza Stain]

I couldn't keep my hands off your a*s either. An interesting write, I suppose. Also, I'm guessing a lot of the beautiful women you have been around don't shower much, which I can respect.

[The Twin Arenas]

thanks for the read, guv'nr

[h d e rushin]

my picture of Pittsburg is that of Detroit, only more overalled. Steel overhead. Large men
strapped to conveyors. As if flowers cant grow there or that love won't happen..
Years ago, while the cab drove from the Leonardo Davinchi airport to Rome, the caves
were filled with prostitutes. And I thought, what a contrast to beauty.

I love this poem mainly because of the contrasts you present..well done.
dana

[The Twin Arenas]

thanks. i really appreciate this.

[Baby Ricochet]

I've been to Pittsburgh and I've been with a hot chick who smelt weird so this poem speaks to me. I liked the imagery and comparisons between the two. Pittsburgh is hella confusing to drive in if you're not a local and we all know how baffling women can be at times so it's a fair comparison.

[thumbelina]

The repetition works really well. I'm enjoying your poems, they are interesting reads.

[The Twin Arenas]

thanks a lot.

[Lyn Anderson]

The ending with you is nearly always a surprise.

[The Twin Arenas]

hope it's not jarring or zsomething

[Lyn Anderson]

yes and no, but isn't that kind of the point?

[The Twin Arenas]

Well, ya, it's supposed to be a bit of surprise. I mean, I like "endings." I think they're an important part of the thing. I guess I meant I hope the endings aren't like wtf. There's always supposed to be enough in them to be able to trace them back through the piece. I hear what you're saying, though.

[Matching Socks]

Big finish, love that. Nice job buddy.

[The Twin Arenas]

thanks a lot, Ana

[Matching Socks]

You're very welcome. :D
It's Tuesday, international smile day.
Hope you're smiling!

[The Twin Arenas]

ya more or less.

[Matching Socks]

That would be called a smirk then...
Hope it gets better for ya.

[The Twin Arenas]

ha, it's good. just not, like, grinning like an idiot. it's as good as it can get, bud.

[Matching Socks]

Haha! Good, because I'd hate for you to blow your cover!
(Joking)