Death Awakens Closer

That's all I wanted.

Something special, something blessed in your mind

A depth of hatred, that I despise

Sometimes I think that you waited

For me to lie

I wish you hated, my whole demise...

But you were interested enough to buy into to my cries...

 

I could be your greatest exposure

Within all the rotten composure

I hate the hatred of our composer

Being the waking of us,  death awakens closer

 

This is all I wanted

Was something dead, something devoted and forgotten

Naked, dirty and sexy; out of focus

I only wanted a moment to be feeling the sun

In the wake of a storm, dead and awaiting my son...

Forget me hun..

I have dipped into the medicine of being drunk

And have a strong bite upon my gun....

 

I could be your greatest exposure

Within all the rotten composure

I hate the hatred of our composer

Forgetting the waking of us,  death awakens closer

 

I would love to remember all the things I have forgotten

I would love to forget all the things that have spoiled me rotten

I would love to be all the things I never thought I could be

I would love to be exactly what you have pictured in your dreams...

 

But I am only me....

A n d..., with that I remind you....

 

I could be your greatest exposure

Within all the rotten composure

I hate the hatred of our composer

Living by the waking of us,  death awakens closer

Reviews

[ICE]

I've been reading your work for sometime now...and I've begun to notice that you're putting a whole lot of yourself into your work. You write so passionatly... you let your reader feel your emotions as if they were their own. Jace this is amazing! I hope that whoever you wrote this for gets the message.

~Ice

[GBU POETRY ONLY]

ONe word review: Revealorama

[TransparentHearts]

Such a rhymatic poem and so intenseful of emotion and a deep passion. It's a beautiful piece of work.

[AbsentElements]

There's a certain rhythm about this poem that makes it perfect for lyrics. I love the way certain lines rhyme. All in all this is a perfect write. Very interesting to read.

[deeps]

I could be your greatest exposure
Within all the rotten composure
I hate the hatred of our composer
Forgetting the waking of us, death awakens closer

Love these lines the best
Awesome write full of truth
Well written.

[Ladysue]

This had a tremendous amount of passion. Very strongly expressed. Much pain in here, but brilliantly written.

[Stacey Watts]

Your emotions on this piece are so deep. I think with a certain amount of despair. Awesome job on expressing yourself.

[Sheila Kline]

Jason,

This is surely a most personal message written to someone that needs to hear, and feel the outpouring of your heart and spirit! You have been struggling, and hopefully this write will help you understand as you express your deepest emotions for another! Stay on track, focused, and determined to obtain the outcome that you desire....you deserve it!!

Feeling the depth of your pain!

Sheila