At the end when you stated 'I must let go and bury the mask' I thought was a wonderful metaphor for the facade we put on in the name of love. We do all sorts of insane things, put ourselves through drawn-out situations...but I think it's a comfort issue. You're not comfortable with yourself so you put up this guard, and wear it like a coat of arms as a defense mechanism. And in another aspect you're setting out to please, for fear of lonliness. "And sit back and realize this life isn't mine". It seems like clarity always comes a second too late, when we're an inch too deep, way too far gone from an easy way out. When we realize we're trapped in a relationship that's based entirely off the wrong things it can be hard to break away because our endeavours are usually based off the right things and what messed us up was the way we went about attaining them.
"How can I give my all, when all is less?" this was my favorite line. I'm a fanatic for quandrys and you've just added one to my collection. It's perfection in its honest approach.
Sorry for the tangent, but all the underlying themes in this one screamed at me and I had to yell back "Hey Jay, this is what I got out of it"
This was so emotional, it made me want to cry (in a good way). Every stanza was so strong it could've stood on its own making the poem in its entirety one of the best I've ever read! Super awesome job :]
Wow! another one!! i love this...great work again...!!! this as well goes to my favorites...
loved each word again...all entwined so perfectly!
the end being my favorite...
"Looking back now, I've got to wonder how
Life and love were all lost and not found
But I must let go
And bury the mask
Once and for all, and leave it all in my past"
deeply heartfelt and moving...emotions flow freely and effortlessly here...loved the way you've painted your heart out with our words...
This is truly an amazing piece of sheer artistry. You have woven a masterpiece of human tapestry within a soul-searching lamentation to love. Willingly you submit yourself to the scrutiny of why you lost and what you will do to regain the love and passion of this special woman. Great work and sheer poetry of emotions. If you haven't lived it, you really can't write it.
That was amazine!
seriously those word totally spoke to me!
I love this poem! Its so really and so true! I love it!
I know now why you won!
awesome job jason!
First off, let me introduce myself. My name is Jason, and I live in West Virginia. I am twenty seven years old and have been writing poetry, journals, diaries, and short stories since I was a very yo.. more..