Blood Soaked Flower

The lost soul is taken advantage of.

Bloody flowers
Tell the stories of fornication
From beyond the sheets of sin
The sweat remains dormant
Like a tick in a shirt
It waits
As it hangs on the heart heavy
And she feeds mindless
Blinded by the shadows
Of her ever dying need to feed
She opens her flower
To the sharp knife tip
Of a heart that has slipped
Unto the kiss
And it carrys forever
A daisy soaked in blood
Crying at night
Still searching for love

Reviews

[Brittany]

I like this portrayal of love.

It shows the more parasitical aspect, our desperate need for said love. Our lusts and longings blind us and hinder us...and then we're left, still as vulnerable as ever.

The metaphors are strong here, the flowers and blood convey strong opposing images of sexuality, life, beauty, pain, death. Daisies remind me of innocence for some reason, but it's very effective.

If I haven't told you before, I'll state it again. I like your mind.

[Jean]

Wow I love all the metaphors :D Especially the flower/knife one. Wow. Lol. :)
This definitely sculpts quite the descriptive image. The ending really ties it up.
Awesome job. ^^

[Flow~]

yes you do have some great images here. It is a sad tone but I enjoyed reading it.

[Jason]

thank you for al lthe wonderful reviews!

[Drifter]

There is some strong imagery here and very power, albeit, dark undertones. Still, there seem to be a few typos that could be fixed. Nevertheless, not bad at all.

[Melissa Kesead]

Beautiful imagery tainted with sadness. A wonderful write!

[Fran Marie]

To the sharp knife tip
Of a heart that has slipped
Unto the kiss

a very descriptive piece with vivid imagery thru~out

so deeply expressed and well penned~Fran Marie

[Bud]

This is an excellent write based on a subject that is very much a large part of life...yet is seldom addressed.
Outstanding work of art! Keep up the great work!

[Butterflymom]

Beautiful imagery. This is an awesome piece!

[ICE]

Wow! This is an amazing piece of work!

[Alyssa]

This was beautifully written.
"As it hangs on the heart heavy
And she feeds mindless
Blinded by the shadows"
I liked that part a lot.
I feel the pain in this piece, which is good :)