Don't Tread On Me

A motto from our ancestors of the original 13 colonies.

I see the hate in your eyes

I feel the resentment in disquise

I sense the dark clouds in the sky

But all you see is me on the outside

 

Don't look that way at me

I've been through s**t you can't believe

So before you label what you see

Take a look on how I used to be

 

This is my life, my story

You have no right to look at me dirty

With any luck, I'll live to see thirty

How dare you judge without knowing me

 

I never knew a true family

But you hang out with yours by the sea

Why should I let you see the real me

When your whole life evolves around happy

 

You have family and friends

All I have is paper and pens

For years, I've made my life make pretend

Forgetting to tie my loose ends

 

What's your excuse for looking at me that way?

Don't say you spaved out because you do it every day

You don't know how much I don't say

If I said it all, your mind and heart will melt away

 

So next time you see someone like me

Give the situation your sensitivity

Because I can almost guarantee

That they, too, have a story

Reviews

[Wake Up!]

Begging for empathy, a very good piece from my favorite poet (: I love this one, the flow was a bit scratchy here and there, but otherwise the piece moved very smoothly. Bravo.

[Joiedevivre]

Your feelings jump off the page and speak to my pain love your writing. Reads like it flowed right out of you. What you say needs to be told. Bravo.

[Solidad]

"You have family and friends
All I have is paper and pens
For years, I've made my life make pretend
Forgetting to tie my loose ends"

Probably the most magnanimous four lines you've strung together yet.. J'adore

[.shalynn.009.]

"For years, I've made my life make pretend" I'm not sure what you meant by this, unless the "make" wasn't supposed to be there.

A more serious poem. It's like a rant to someone who disrespected you. I could feel the anger and self-rightiousness in the words, and I didn't find too amny places where the rhythm or rhymes were forced.

"You have family and friends
All I have is paper and pens" My favorite line, because I think anyone on here could relate to that on some level. I know I can.

Another good poem from you, one that speaks many truths. The last line really brought it all together. You never know what someone has been through, the demons they carry or the strength of their souls. Good write. Thanks for the RR

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree with this poem. Never rate another person life. You never know the road they have traveled and lived. The story in the poem was very good. You made the point loud and clear. We need always to think first before speaking. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote