If I Could

To stop loving you isn't that easy

If I could

I would forget about you

And go on with this empty feeling

That is filled when you’re here with me

 

If I could

I would walk away from you

Fighting the urge to be vulnerable

The way I am when I’m with you

 

If I could

I would go deaf

So I wouldn’t hear the soft voice

That hypnotizes me

 

If I could

I would go blind

To stop myself from seeing your beauty

That makes my heart weak

 

I would go through all this

To stop living a lie

To stop loving you

Because the pain is too much

 

But I can’t

So I won’t stop loving you

Because I refuse to leave you

Even if it means losing what’s left of me

 

I will continue to be hypnotized

Weak

Vulnerable

And painfully complete

Author's Note

Question of the Poem: In this piece, the idea is to stop loving the girl. However in the second to last stanza I wrote 'Because I refuse to leave you.' Why would I write that if the idea is to stop loving the girl?

Reviews

[MsJewel]

I truly believe we don't choose who we love, we "just love" and it is a bittersweet love when you struggle knowing the relationship isn't a healthy one. I can definitely relate to the struggle of knowing you should leave, yet knowing you can't - your heart won't let you.

This poem just melts my heart. Lovely work.

:) Julie

[Wake Up!]

such feeling, it was rather heartbreaking. On the whole well written. Bravo

[Blossom]

but its your heart's desire and usually we follow through with what our heart wants rather than our brain. I have to say that there is a lot of struggle in this poem in the question to leave or not to leave, and I have to say that for you it would probably be a very hard decision

[Red Brick Keshner]

It's because your mind tells you the struggle and the pain must be avoided, but the heart says that loving her is all worth it, both the good and the bad of it.

[Zachary_James]

This poem is really good you created such a fantastic feel in this poem. I mean you are such a great writer, and this poem left me amazed by the way you explained it. I am completely out of words. Great work

[Solidad]

DISCLAIMER: I DON'T HATE YOUR WRITING BUT I'M GOING TO BE HONEST WITH YOU.

First, I do believe this is a genuinely 'good' poem BUT because I've seen your unique take on love in the form of poetry (a few of which are shelved in my library) I think this poem is a cop-out for you. I find it very plain and and very 'textbook'. You write beautifully and I want to reiterate that I'm not saying this piece is bad. Its just not up to par with the rest of your poems about love.

Second, this isn't an English class. You need to learn to respect the reviews you get regardless of how frustrating they can be. You don't need to post questions and requiring two reviews. We're all posting our opinions and using our free time to do this. Posting questions won't change the content of your reviews.

[EvilAngel]

I don't know. all i know is its a really gr8 poem ;)

[Adam :P]

:) yay got one right! that would be interesting, i will try and answer them, and take your time lol.

[Ian Faraway]

I think you're answer tops mine by far, Adam. :D Good job. I'm trying to post a question to each poem or writing I have and if people get close to right then I'll review TWO of their works...but you have to wait I'm a bit swamped right now but i'll do it later tonight

[Adam :P]

o wow, because you can't stop loving the girl no matter what? you refuse to leave her because you can't leave her. maybe?