Happy Birthday Dad

Here's a poem I wrote for my father for his birthday. We've been through rough times but I still love him. This poem's for him.

Almost three years have past
And we still managed to last
I want you to know one thing
That we will be everlasting
I know life hasn't treated you well
Put yourself out there and tried to sell
Just me, you, and different girls
Life put is in a big whirl

What I did was pretty low
I saw the pain in your eyes
But you're a proud man and didn't let it show
When you're down, look towards the skies
Chances are I'm looking there
Just know I love you
And leaving home was a lot to bare
And I know it hurt you too

So happy birthday, Dad
And this is me telling you
Don't let life make you sad or mad
I love you

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful poem. Hard not to hurt the good people in a life. Sometime forgiveness is a easy as re-entering the door you left. I like the emotion and the ending. Forgiveness and love is the key to a good life. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Jazique]

Well done no errors as far as I can tell. Awe that was so sweet and Father's day so close too. Well done I could feel the emotions of love in your words. You descriptions and words of metaphors and similes played wonderfully. Well done and keep up the excellent work.

[Robyn]

this poem almost brought me to tears. packed with emotion and love
great work

[Shalini Dinesh]

a fantastic poem, and a beautiful birthday gift for your dad, he will be proud of you and happy to hear this... wonderful dedication

[Taylor H.]

I loved this poem. Im sure your father loved it and it proud to call you his child. This was a wonderful poem

[Confidential]

(This is my first review)

All I can say is, "Wow." I decided to give this piece a try because coincidentally, today is my own father's birthday, and to be completely honest, if it wasn't for that fact alone, I most likely wouldn't have even bothered with reading it. However, I certainly am glad that I did, as it turned out to be a more than worthwhile (if also quite short) read! The second stanza is what grabbed me the most, my favorite few lines specifically are:

"When you're down, look towards the skies
Chances are I'm looking there
Just know I love you
And leaving home was a lot to bare
And I know it hurt you too"

Well done!

Respect,
-Confidential

[OkieWonKenokie]

Beautiful. I wish I had my dad in my life but I guess his lost. Loverly write. I love the lines:

"When you're down, look towards the skies
Chances are I'm looking there
Just know I love you"

Strong lines and strong emotion throughout the poem.

[Chilson, Joshua]

Simply poetry from the heart "And leaving home was a lot to bare.", takes a strong soul to step out of your own shoe's and into another's. Good write.

[Revolved]

This is very sweet and touching. I love the last stanza! It's nice and wonderful for any father! Excellent job :)

[Norma M Sutton]

Nice.