These words so innocent But you use them in resentment I can feel
the poison of each word Struggling to breathe them as if strangled by
cord These words have been taught for you to use But each time
you say this phrase, it's being abused You and you alone Have made
these words hateful down to the bone Shall I let this crime go on? Illegally
playing 'love' as if its a con Do not use love's name in vain For
when you do, God cries rain
Please, please don't lie to me For
my heart, you've lost the key Though thrown away than lost Is
this my cost? A broken heart and me standing here Saying 'I love
you' and no one else there Nothing but darkness echoes through and
through I love you I love you I love you As god's tears rain
down on me I look down and cry too, reluctantly
perfection of error less, nicely done(I'm just making up words now.) As for your poem I like it. It was amazing and creative and I like the lines with "Do not use love's name in vain, For when you do, God cries rain," and "As God's tears rain down on me, I look down and cry too, reluctantly." It was was creative how you made "I love you" seem like an echo too. You whole poem well written and rhymed in so many places. Well done and keep up the excellent work.
This was great. There were some really intense emotions in the poem and I was drawn to it. I really liked the rhyme. I think it made the poem stronger. I really enjoyed it. :D
I've read a few of your poems, I like your style! :D This one, even though it seems someone has broken your heart, it's still a wonderful poem. Your words speak of character and honesty. Thanks for the read, and keep up the writing!
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