I can understand being cursed Or punished by the Gods For the bad I've endorsed And allowed to steer me for so long
But to put such beauty near me Just to have it fade away After a moment of being happy Makes me heart sick with the blues
Someone I could truly love Someone who can make me better Someone who won't shove Me away when it starts to get hard
But you're just too good to be true Like a bittersweet daydream Where I wake up without you Now I wait to see if you'll indulge my crazy
I don't even know you that well But I'd hate to watch you leave Without offering you my heart for sale So it can experience your love, too
I know you're testing me out To see if I'm worth your time and love One second hopeful, the next full of doubt Just reject me so I can stop being insane
It's the unknown that's killing And the fear of losing something I don't have That keeps my head reeling Why do I desire something that's out of my league?
Now this rhyming pattern I LOVE! Wonderful job on this one, clear and detailed-just the way I like it. Also, would you mind checking out my latest poem "Brighter Day?"
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Of course. And yeah, the other one was a bit experimental. Thank you for the review.
This is sad and hurts to read... love is a fickle thing...
Heartbreak is inevitable, yet within the tribulation you'll find true love. The journey may be rough at first but once you find the right path it's worth riding through the stormy sea...trust me, Ian...
This wraps my head around the beginning hopes of a new relationship....all the questions, am I good enough, where is this going, is there any hope at all. Good read with my wake up cuppa this morning.
Now I wait to see if you'll indulge my crazy
There should be t-shirts, just saying. :-)
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Good thing about indulging the crazy is the T-shirt... and I hear the brownies are fairly delicious .. read moreGood thing about indulging the crazy is the T-shirt... and I hear the brownies are fairly delicious as well. Thank you for reading and reviewing. -Ian
11 Years Ago
Ha love looks altogether different on brownies....my pleasure Ian.
11 Years Ago
What if I told you that this longing and insanity for love WAS for brownies? ^.-
11 Years Ago
That's a poem of a whole different color....
11 Years Ago
A delicious color?
11 Years Ago
Possibly psychedelic....
11 Years Ago
Oh... oh my.... well just to reverse the confusion I've caused it was about love.... not brownies. B.. read moreOh... oh my.... well just to reverse the confusion I've caused it was about love.... not brownies. But I do love brownies , too.
11 Years Ago
Hmmm yes, I figured as much, but brownies are far less complicated....
11 Years Ago
Like life SHOULD be. Simpler and less complicated is a lot less stressful to deal with.
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