Voice Lost Among the Raindrops

Tears that are unable to fall, locked deep within
find a hidden release among a steady, cold rainfall.

Kissing the forehead, caressing the curves of the face,
rain dances upon the surface before falling onto the earth.

One raindrop loaded with one hundred meanings and full of many secrets,
emotions that can drown the soul and extinguish the fragile light of life.

The drops of water, pulled deep within dry soils in need of revival,
vanish quickly into the ground as if they were never even there.

Leaving not a trace behind but only that of an unspoken promise,
the promise of its return some other day, some other night.

A time where a sunless sky will crack and crumble,
all from above will break wide open and fall apart,
and the icy drops of rain will silently speak once more.

Author's Note

Something a bit different from my usual types of writing. The rough inspiration of it happened while I was standing out in the rain at night smoking a cigarette. Figured I'd play around with it and see what happens. Not sure how I feel about it though...

Reviews

[RachelReaper]

this was different, but I liked it a lot. Nice inspiration if your just outside smoking, but I think that's what's cool about it. That us, writers, can draw inspiration from anything.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thanks! And I totally agree about writers pulling inspiration from anything.

[Ahmad Cox]

Very mesmerizing and dreamlike effect. I really enjoy it.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thanks :)

[quinfinn]

i found this quite profound and very relevant to life. a solid and entertaining write. i loved the line about a single drop of rain having many meanings and secrets.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thank you :)

[Kelsey]

Whitney, my dear, you never write something that doesn't simply blow me away. Every single piece of yours that I read leaves me wondering what in the world you'll write next. I feel like you could use the same topic and write 15 poems about it, with no trouble at all. You never fail to amaze me, gorgeous. This piece is different, and that's only one thing I love about it. It's so beautiful, just like the mind of its writer. Lovely job, as always. xo

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Oh my gosh, thank you so much, love! It's reviews like yours that I look to when I start doubting my writings and questioning myself. The support and feedback you give me truly helps me to continue writing, even through times when my mind seems black and dead and can't find any inspiration. You are so very kind. Thanks so much again!! :)

[Allycat]

It's different, but I really loved it! especially these lines:

"Kissing the forehead, caressing the curves of the face,
rain dances upon the surface before falling onto the earth."

thanks for sharing :)

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thank you!!

[Allycat]

no problem :)
I always enjoy reading your writing!

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Have you been writing lately? I haven't seen you post any new pieces for awhile it seems like.

[Allycat]

I haven't had time to really :/ too much schoolwork! D: I just wrote something today tho

[Steven Cash]

Different but wonderful

98/100

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thank you :)