Is There No Way Out?

A short piece about shadows of the mind.

Melancholy melodies weep in the mind
A hopeless soul searching for salvation,
   as an innocent life dies
Begging for revival,
   while bound to a darkness so heavy and bare
In a mind that's beyond haunted,
   forever living in a nightmare

Reviews

[Allycat]

Wonderful! This is different from most of the pieces you've written. They tend to be longer, but it still has the same intensity as your other ones
great write!

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thank you! I tried to change it up a bit since, like you mentioned, my pieces tend to be longer so figured I'd try to shorten it up a bit.

[RachelReaper]

The rhyming is right on time, ans I like that you decided to mix things up and make this a shorter one, but with as much meaning as your other ones.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thanks! It's definitely more of a challenge for me to shorten my pieces since they tend to be longer. But every now and then I attempt to.

[quinfinn]

when i looked at your profile i was taken by the fact that you love the writings of Poe and Plath. i must confess that i am not so familiar with Sylvia Plath's work but Poe is my absolute favorite ...your art reflects that darker nature in us and i find that appealing. this is an excellent write.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thank you so much! Poe was such an amazing writer wasn't he? You should check out some of Plaths works. They arent quite up to Poe's darkness but she does have quite a few darker, well written pieces. Again, thanks for the review!

[quinfinn]

Poe was an intense writer,, to say the least. obviously he was a tortured soul who knew the meaning of fear, sadness and self doubt. such a tragic figure...he died drunk, penniless and syphillitic at a relatively young age in the slums of Baltimore. but his thrillers chill the spine, fire the imagination and reach into our nightmares. also capable of intense and tragic beauty, his poem Annabelle Lee is my favorite..."for this maiden lived with but one desire, to love and be loved by thee" gives me chills even to this day.

[That1Nerd23]

This is wonderful! I love the way you expressed the longing for something more; the longing for revival. Words can not expressed how much I like your poem. (:

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thank you for the wonderful review! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[That1Nerd23]

You are very very welcome. (:

[Kelsey]

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. All of your writing has a way of moving the reader, causing them to feel the same way you must have felt when writing the piece. You're truly talented, and when I see a poem of yours, I'm always so eager to read it.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Aww that truly means a lot! Thank you! :) I appreciate your reviews

[Poison Ivy]

the opening line struck me this morning as i looked out the window. just lovely pet.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thank you so much :)