(780) Cinquain

Cinquain is syllabic verse in a 24682 structure.

To die

for country is

still death; to live without

country is death wearing a bad

disguise.

Reviews

[CD Campbell]

I think I've written a few sometime long ago, maybe over twenty years. Might try my hand at it again. I like how you were able to pull out a coherent poetic message without it sounding like gibberish, which is how I mostly read this form from others.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I tried my hand at this somewhat in response to William Carlos Williams - just to see how much I could say in such a limited space. Thanks for checking in on me.

[CD Campbell]

I like WCW. No Problem.

[keith]

unlike most i have seen or read
a call not made but clear message doth ring
life on one's knee is a bruise earned
rather than the honor of warrior worn

no kidding around i am enjoying your offerings and shall read each as if it is the first taste of knowledge gained

[Richard🖌]

I celebrate you, Syr Winston,

It has long been my contention that when one undertakes to compose poetry in structured form, it should be according to the rules, as is humanly possible … which you've accomplished with your Cinquain in exemplary fashion.
Furthermore, the sheer brilliance of delivering such an impactfully clear, concise message, sans a smidgen of ambiguity … which, by virtue of forced compliance with meter, this form is notorious for. But, by sheer original creativity of poetical voice and in utilizing smooth syntax and seamless enjambment, you've enviously avoided.

Splendid work, Dear Poet … very much respected and enjoyed.
Thank you sincerely! ⁓ Richard🖌

[W. Barrett Munn]

Thank you, Richard. I've so many poems posted here I'd totally forgotten this one. I really should go through and clean them up but that would take days and days.

[Richard🖌]

Please, leave them all, Winston,
I have enjoyed your poetry, even though so many (of late) cannot be reviewed.

[Miss Sharon]

Bravo. Your first poem posted on this site is a winner! ~Sharon

[W. Barrett Munn]

Thanks. Just messing with form.

[Chris Shaw]

Am interesting form. Brevity which carries a strong message. Thank you for the lesson in cinquains WBM.

Chris

[W. Barrett Munn]

Brevity certainly forces concentration. Pound, T.S. Elliot, William Carlos Williams all it’s master.

[Aura]

This is an interesting poem, to die for country is still death. But to live without patriotism and for the country is like a symbol of death in the sense that it seems this country doesn't even exist or have anything great about it, just a piece of land. The cinquain form of poetry is interesting, short but a powerful form! Thanks for sharing!

[W. Barrett Munn]

I find that the discipline of every now and then writing in a short form or in the imaging style is beneficial to all other poetry. Try it, maybe you will enjoy it, too. Thanks.

[Aura]

You're welcome and maybe I will try the cinquain form eventually.

[Temperance]

I'm not yet familiar with all the forms of poetry so, I find this interesting as a learning tool. Thank you for sharing.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I think it is helpful at times to work within strict guidelines and minimum of words. You might look up Ezra Pound and his rules of imaging .

[Temperance]

Thank you!

[Einstein Noodle]

noticed your review on one of jacob's poems .. thank you for sharing your cinquain .. super turn ... very brilliant says i .... as Bobbly Dylan sang .. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wC10VWDTzmU
E. ... love and peace

[W. Barrett Munn]

I appreciate the feedback. I have a difficult time deciding whether to post here or submit for publication as I think the former destroys the opportunity for the latter.

[Einstein Noodle]

well ... i am not one to have an opinion on that ... once we hit the publish thingy .. it belongs to the throngs says i! ;) ........................

[Kelly Scheppers]

Love the composition and delivery. I'll have to try my hand at it someday!

[W. Barrett Munn]

Thanks. I definitely urge you to try this form. I find form practices quite helpful. Are you familiar with short poems of William Carlos Williams?

[Kelly Scheppers]

No, but I will look him up. Any read in particular you could suggest?

[W. Barrett Munn]

The red wheelbarrow for one

[W. Barrett Munn]

Also To a Poor Old Woman

[Cherrie Palmer]

I really enjoy writing this form of poetry and you showcase this style so well.

[W. Barrett Munn]

Thank you!