WEEPING WILLOWS

There should be a name for those

Haiku moments, simple jewels of

fertile breezes, rustled leaves, and

contented heart. Snick! Time-trapped!

To bathe in Amber, cached in little

black-velvet mind-drawers; ker-flump!

Out it spills into the sun and a million

miles later, I am taken back…

Down a willow lined path in showers

of honey, a mossy rockface wet with dew,

while the rain does connect-the-dots

on my sleeves and I am suddenly

AIR

I am gold, the air is gold, this instant

is gold, and feels like warm honey,

time is honey, doled by the drop

now and then to catch my eye with

sunlight in the density of one instant.

A bit of jewel to contain everything,

until a gobbet of next time dribbles by.

Reviews

[Laz K.]

William Golding said, "Language fits over experience like a straitjacket." This piece is a poetic expression of the same sentiment. However, paradoxically, every time we realize this truth, we enrich language - like this poem does with its creative diction.

[Vol]

Thank you Lanz, for your support and review. Thank you also for being a reader of poetry, as a group, we grow thin...
Vol

[Lorry]

I have a collection of haiku that I call sillybles, a play on the word syllables, but I doubt that's what your adapter here Vol.
Perhaps thoughtlets would be more apt to those imaginings we remember from the ether, with no rhyme or reason to when, how or even if they flitter through our mind like a greatest hits collection playing on random.

[Vol]

Lorry,
When I wrote this, it was as a captured moment that almost went unnoticed... something floated into the sun rays leaking past a curtain. Flash...Oh! and then I wondered if every instant was self-contained, or part of a moving whole...
Vol

[Betty Hermelee]

Sear Vol
Little bits of Haiku is a great line; it's bit of moments of ahhhh...when you can be alone, smell the roses, take deep breaths, bask in the sunshine, imagine everything that enlightens you...and take it all in, before reality sets in...your words are vivid as if you were creating a painting! lovely!
Warmly, B

[Vol]

Oh, Betty, thank you!
Exactly... and those times are always there, if we could just drag ourselves out ot the clouds to see them...
Vol

[Betty Hermelee]

Exactly!!!🌷
Always a pleasure Vol
Warmly
B🌷

[Thomas W Case]

My favorite tree. Great writing, my friend.

[Vol]

Thomas, Mine too like green fountains!

[John the Baptist]

Sounds like a mystical experience, a moment when all is one and all is right. Of course, physical reality resumes a moment later and we are faced with all the limitations of the separateness. Still, we can be open for those moments of light to reappear. For they are what we are.

[Vol]

John,
It took five years to convince my wife to do the work to put together a literary rag for Columbia, Tn. She said, all these kids, these beautiful poets won't last a year our of high school. WWE only did the one edition.
Vol

[Dessi]

I love the words "black velvet lined drawers" and "showers" and "honey"...
Oh my, I wager your willows do not weep, Vol.
This is beautiful as always.
Desiree'

[ETERNITY]

@Vol, Curt, Did ya ever watch The Time Tunnel? How sometimes the tunnel would drop the view from the sky to rolling hills of Willow lined pastures and roads of dirt deserted and still in the vacancy of time.
You guys drop me right into the middle of your visions! There are so many cards I've missed in this Game Of Life! Oh, the envy of causing these emotions and the regret of never attempting. You guys are MEN. Thanks for sharing your awesome talent.

[Vol]

Eternity,
Thank you! From what I've read of your poetry you haven't missed any cards at all, you've just traveled different paths, through different jungles and fought different tribes on our way here...Everything I've read of yours has been collectable, teachable, and discussed at length over a good beer... And at least one might need to be followed by a leisurely smoke...
Vol

[Vol]

I bet you have been the density of more than one instant, when you were on fire in frozen time...

[ETERNITY]

Truthfully? I have fantasies. My entire life is fantasy when I'm not doing Life in general. I will, though, object to s**t being dropped on me during my vision.

[ETERNITY]

@Vol, Honey Pie, "when you were on fire in frozen time" comes often when I am speaking to you.

[redzone]

What a great dollop of Haiku mastery this poem is Vol! And yet not one Haiku. I think what the 'gold' is here is your words, the images they invoke; how they entice colors to paint your mind with fancy and the impatience of "next time". I enjoyed devouring this haiku without haiku and everything in it. And await down by those willows for more!!

-Curt

[Vol]

Curt!
Wow!!! Thank you... I'm rather abashed!
Vol