These lines I added in as I typed this: "Today I choose no longer to be that dark, hurt, silent, mysterious guy, Today I choose to be happy, full of life, and open to all." The way the words move to the right shows positive progress. Anyways, I hope you like it. If you don't like the lines I added in, forget them. That's more for me. You can use it for you still without those.
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Today I am glad that I have read your words although hard on these diabetic eyes I give it a shot sure glad I tried....good job
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
I'm glad you were able to read them. :) And I'm glad you are glad you read them. I hope they help yo.. read moreI'm glad you were able to read them. :) And I'm glad you are glad you read them. I hope they help you. :))
nicely written, Blade! you're so full of positive message now hahaha. I like the experimentation you did with lines and spaces to show progress. that adds uniqueness to the poem. hey, there's nothing wrong for being mysterious guy, a happy, mysterious guy xD ooh and the R part of the 'STRONG' should've been Resilient! xD
Lol, I took the acronym for STRONG from a comment The Pain Bearer left on my "Reflective Essay: True.. read moreLol, I took the acronym for STRONG from a comment The Pain Bearer left on my "Reflective Essay: True Story" but yeah, that would've worked. XD And yes, I guess I could be... But I want to be open, and not seem untouchable, which is the persona I throw off along with don't f*** with me. I'd like to be like the guy from "To Save A Life" (Movie) And I'm glad you liked the way I structured it! And lol, I'm guessing you're saying now because of how many positive things I'm posting compared to how many negatives I was?
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Ive heard of that movie. never watched it tho. well..yes xD I've read some writings of yours that ta.. read moreIve heard of that movie. never watched it tho. well..yes xD I've read some writings of yours that talked about darkness of the self etc. but don't get me wrong. I'm not saying that it's wrong if it's a way of expressing the complicated emotion in you or everyone else. but, yeah, I think we also should balance it with some positive side.
9 Years Ago
You should watch it. It's a very good movie everyone should watch. And yes, I understand. :P
I absolutely love this! I admit that somedays I don't know who I am. Many people change themselves just to fit in with the crowd. But today I'll be me, today I'll start my own crowd! :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
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Yes, even I do that, so I can stay in a certain group I want to be in. I'm glad you liked it, and th.. read moreYes, even I do that, so I can stay in a certain group I want to be in. I'm glad you liked it, and that's great! Make your own crowd; be yourself and like minded people will gravitate towards you. :)
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Yes indeed:)
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XD So do it!
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Okay.. XD
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Lol, you should do it. :p
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Bleh.........
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You should though.
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Later.........
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........... Bye XD
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Hahahahahahahahahahah.... xD sorry, I totally ruined that
I loved the second last verse.. mans a master of his choices and hence his destiny. Great motivational content! Heck I bet if we had this spoken by Al Pacinos inspiring voice on a video itd go viral :)
Good work!
I'm glad you like it! And yeah, that would be awesome... it's something everyone should hear and rea.. read moreI'm glad you like it! And yeah, that would be awesome... it's something everyone should hear and read and believe so it'd be amazing if it went viral... I can't make it go viral right now; my only way would be Youtube (which people keep asking me to make) but I'm not doing yet.
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Lol think about it.
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Think about making the Youtube account? Lol, it would be very diverse... raps to beats... poetry rea.. read moreThink about making the Youtube account? Lol, it would be very diverse... raps to beats... poetry read.... inspiring things like this to some song.... XD
This is so inspiring!
And you better read these lines to yourself everyday! :P
Posted 9 Years Ago
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Okay, I will, and others should too. :P Lol, I didn't send out a RR for this one and you guys are re.. read moreOkay, I will, and others should too. :P Lol, I didn't send out a RR for this one and you guys are reading it. Or at least, as I remember I didn't. XD
I'm glad you liked it. :) Have you seen my "What Can Happen In A Second?"
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Fabulous as well, I truly believe in God's word, cling to what is good and hate what is evil.
.. read moreFabulous as well, I truly believe in God's word, cling to what is good and hate what is evil.
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!
9 Years Ago
I'm glad you liked it. :D I also added a new poem not that long ago, "In thᴉƧ wØrld wə lᴉvə .. read moreI'm glad you liked it. :D I also added a new poem not that long ago, "In thᴉƧ wØrld wə lᴉvə ᴉn.."
I'm changing my name from The Resilient One to The Storyteller and trying to start fresh... believing in myself, believing in others, making this new personality I want to have... I guess I was alread.. more..