I Have A Dark Past (Part One)

I Have A Dark Past (Part One)

A Poem by The StoryTeller
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I have a dark past,
A past that seems it will last.
I need to let it go, as I have with so much stuff already,
But my new life's boat has a dark mast.

Because if I don't let it go,
Here and there,
Will always have my past there.
And if I don't let it go, all I can do is stare.

I'm in pain's deadly grasp,
It sometimes truly does feel as if that hold will last.
Like I'm inside a full length body cast,
The weight and pain is what I feel living in the past.

© 2015 The StoryTeller


Author's Note

The StoryTeller
I plan on making this into a (somewhat) epic poem, adding parts as new posts over time, rather than all one. Then once I'm finished, I'll copy everything and put it together in one post and delete the individual posts. The other parts of this epic will be free verse, haiku, song lyrics, stories; each one will be slightly different and will have different form. Tell me what you think of part one in the comments. And tell me if you think I should write this creative epic, and if you agree with how I'm doing it, advice, anger, etc. Just talk to me in the comments.

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Nice !!!! Well written :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


The StoryTeller

9 Years Ago

Thank you. Glad you liked it. Think I should continue with it into an epic?
Few people have not made mistakes. I have made many.
"Like I'm inside a full length body cast,
The weight and pain is what I feel living in the past."
I believe wisdom is when we learn from the past and our mistakes. We have gain wisdom. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


The StoryTeller

9 Years Ago

I'm glad you can find understanding in the midst of this, and I'm glad you found wisdom and liked it.. read more
I like it so far. It sounds like my inner thoughts. For a long time, I felt trapped. Somedays I still do. So far, you have a great beginning. I say go epic!

Posted 9 Years Ago


The StoryTeller

9 Years Ago

Yeah, I guess that's true. The great thing is, sooner or later, there will be a day that there will .. read more
♥ Ari Skye ♥

9 Years Ago

Yeah I guess. But then again, would we be truly happy then?
The StoryTeller

9 Years Ago

Well, since it's God that's making that day for us, I assume the answer would be yes.
It's a great Idea, I'm lookind forward to it!
I had a kind of dark past too...
Incredible poem!

Posted 9 Years Ago


The StoryTeller

9 Years Ago

Glad you liked it. :) I'll continue with the idea then. Sorry about your past. I wouldn't wish that .. read more
I like this and I can relate to it the pain and shame of the past. But yes move on let go it will only hold you back. You need room to grow and the past takes up way to much space.

Posted 9 Years Ago


The StoryTeller

9 Years Ago

It does, and it resides in The Mind. And as I said in The Body, The Mind, The Soul, if you get lost .. read more
You use words that you don't need to. Example "truly" in the third to last line doesn't add anything. Actually you could take out "sometimes" as well. As a reader I assume the speaker is telling the truth (unless otherwise told). What is you dark past? How can you describe it better? You use the word past four times in three stanzas.
I think you should write whatever you want, but I think you should add some consistency.

Posted 9 Years Ago


The StoryTeller

9 Years Ago

Thank you, I'll work on that. I'll take out the truly and sometimes, and see what I can add to make .. read more
The StoryTeller

9 Years Ago

Hey, I revised this and re-posted it as a separate post. Tell me what you think.

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