Once Upon A Time... (Rap) (Skit)

A rap skit I made. I don't have a beat to this yet, and I am pondering making it into a full song. If I do, I will post the song here as separate from the skit.

Once upon a time/I thought what would happen if I couldn't rhyme/if that evil twin part of me was to die/would I still be able to rap/or would that part of me turn out to be a lie/and if I could still rap/even with the tiniest bit of skill left over/the rest of it gone down the drain into the grave with my/evil twin/then why/would I continue to rap/and how/but here today now/I know what I'd do/I'd rap for Christ if he'd let me/and if he did that would be just wow/

Maybe people wouldn't like my new stuff no more 'cuz there's no more pain/no more outright showing of my dark interior/my acid rain/'cuz that part of me would be dead and given to God/he would've been lain/down to rest/took two spiritual bullets to the chest/and I'd no longer be as big of a mess/and possibly not so often depressed/not feelin like my universe is crushin in on me making me compressed/

I'd be reborn fully once and for all in God/I'd be blessed/and I wouldn't be so stressed/I'd make my home with Him/He'd be my nest/and I'd be there willingly/I wouldn't be held back by my evil me/I'd no longer be trussed/and yeah maybe I'm insane/with some kind of sick infatuation/but I don't want to anymore maim/and I'm trying to get out of this situation/let go of that part of me, my supposed main/get out of Pain Nation/go to Love Country/go to every festival/circus/get out and see God's people on every occasion/and see that so many aren't racist/'cuz there's more than Caucasian/God is with me/he's my liaison/I love this happiness/this sensation/he's with me and I'm part of Love Nation...

Author's Note

So yes, if I make it into a full rap, that verse would need some work. But it's good for now. Tell me what you think of it in the comments. Does it inspire you? Do you agree? Disagree? Do you think I should make it into a full song? Do you have an idea for the beat I should use for either the full song or the skit? Tell me what you think. Be honest.

Reviews

[Tks]

I was thinking of an Eminem beat to this hahaha. This would be really cool if it became an audiotape!

[The StoryTeller]

Yeah, I hope to eventually publish all my music. :) This was inspired by several songs and beats, one of which was actually EminƎm's Evil Twin. :p Glad you liked it.

[iNSOMniAC]

I need to hear this with music. *-*
It's way too amazing to go without publishing.

[The StoryTeller]

Yeah, but I don't have the money to publish.... I might record it with one of my friends, probably without music though. If I don't, eventually it will go on that Youtube account I'm going to make.

[Lizardo]

Full song please xD It does inspire, The rap is really good

[The StoryTeller]

Okay, I'll try to make it a full song. I dunno how it'll work out though. I mean, I haven't posted many raps, and I know that's one thing I am very good at (almost everyone I rap to rates me 8-10) but recently I've been at a loss for words or at least truly awe inspiring make you think rhymes.

[Lizardo]

Just let it all flow :)

[The StoryTeller]

Lol, okay, I'll try.

[Cool Girl]

You should make a full song!! I love the line "I would rap for Christ of he'd let me"
This really made me smile. Thanks for sharing:)

[The StoryTeller]

Yeah, the whole reason the "if" is because I've made so many mistakes in my life, and I'm so unworthy. But if he'd let me, I'd take the entire pain of the world, no matter how much it hurt me, just so others could be happy. And if he'd let me, I'd rap for him and spread him in my words.

[The StoryTeller]

I'll try to make it into a full song.

[Cool Girl]

Okay cool:)

[The StoryTeller]

It just might be awhile before I get to it, or before I post it.

[Cool Girl]

Alright:)
....

[The StoryTeller]

But I will get around to it.

[Cool Girl]

Good......

[The StoryTeller]

It's not like I'd never get around to it... And lol one of us needs to decide not to reply or we'll both keep commenting. XD

[Cool Girl]

Okay.. :)
Let's end this with C U Laterz xD
Now, you comment back saying "C U Later" and I won't respond LOL

[The StoryTeller]

Ok, let's do that. You say see you later first. :p

[Cool Girl]

Okay, See you later:)

[The StoryTeller]

:p See you later.

[Lenah Mehzabin]

Haha this one is good i like it .. it really looks like a lot of anger or saying or complain came out with a blow all together . It is not funny but somehow it made me smile ! nice work !

[The StoryTeller]

:) I'm glad it made you smile. And yeah, it was kind of temper tantrum at first about how I felt, but then I realized God is there for me and therefore my pain doesn't really matter. "Don't tell God how big your storm is, tell your storm how big your God is." :D