Lyric Poem-Pain

We knew this day would come,

We knew it all along,

Love of mine,

Some day you will die.

 

In your eyes I see the eyes of somebody,

I ponder of something great,

If we’re ever only looking back we will drive ourselves insane,

Sometimes quiet is violent.

 

So then what good am I?

Maybe give me insight between black and white,

Nobody said this stuff makes any sense,

You’re just too good to be true.

 

I cry sometimes about it,

Waging my wars,

Behind my face,

And above my throat.

Reviews

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Blade this was a fantastic piece! I really enjoyed the DCFC reference!
Awesome job, little brother.
By the way, where have you been?

[iNSOMniAC]

"Love of mine,
Some day you will die." OHMAHGAWSHOHMAHGAWSHOHMAHGAWSH. DEATH CAB FOR CUTIE REFERENCE.
Okay, avoid my random musical fan-girl comment. This is a great piece!! I love the message in it!! :))
Yeayus, dat double-chin smiley face doe.

[The StoryTeller]

Lol, very fan-girl. XD I'm not going to tease you about that since I am on two other aritcles... and I'm glad you liked it. :D :))

[Lizardo]

A breakup? Yes probably,
The last stanza sums it all up to create a unique masterpiece.
and they are lyrics? Reminds me of RadioHeado.. they always create some pretty dark, sad but good stuff.
Awesome poem, you did a great job writing this one :)

[The StoryTeller]

Lol, yeah, it did kind of turn into a break up. At first it was about being honest and true, then became a breakup. That's not what the lyrics were before, as there is 21 pilots, Tedashii, and a bunch of other artists in there that didn't write about breakups, but it's how I made it. I'm glad you liked it. :)

[Lizardo]

You're welcome :)

[The StoryTeller]

Have you heard Car Radio and Migraine by 21 pilots? They went in to this, and I think you might like them.

[Lizardo]

I will hear it, I mostly hear Indie rock

[The StoryTeller]

Nice, I listen to everything but haven't listened to any of that in awhile. I hope you'll like the songs, tell me what you think after you read them.

[Lizardo]

I will, don't worry :)

[The StoryTeller]

Okay, and lol, typo, and I don't want to remove the comment. I meant to say listen to them, not read them.

[Lizardo]

Okay don't worry

[The StoryTeller]

Sounds good. :p

[luvs2write]

This actually flowed pretty good for being different pieces from different songs. I like the mental battle in this poem...you did a really good job. 0i8;'p[7ui Sorry, my cat walked across my tablet. He wanted to say something too, I guess. =)

[The StoryTeller]

Yeah, that surprised me to that it flowed that well, I didn't change the lyrics. I just let it flow to what it was, re-arranging the lines I had chosen and splitting apart some, so yeah. You probably don't care about all that. :p Glad you liked it, and glad your cat liked it too. xD

[luvs2write]

I care...and I like it that you comment on all of the reviews. =)

[The StoryTeller]

Lol, I feel like I need to comment back if someone comments. Even if it's just lolololol. It also helps me to stay in touch with my readers and show I care that you care about my writing. :)

[Cool Girl]

What a creative thing to do!! Nice job:)

[The StoryTeller]

Lol, I'm glad you liked it. You should do the same thing. Get 10 songs and do it. It doesn't have to be with other people, although your friends might do it with you, I dunno.

[Cool Girl]

I might try it sometime..
I don't know:)

[The StoryTeller]

Lol, don't I don't know me. Just do it. ;P

[Matthew James Ginn]

The poem is a little hard to piece together. True making the poem a little more comprehensive. Good meaning and lesson.

[The StoryTeller]

Did you understand the poem? Or do I need to revise it? Or were you just saying it was hard to put together having a bunch of lyrics from a bunch of different songs?

[Matthew James Ginn]

I reread it twice. Its okay. Just needs rhythm work cx like it!

[The StoryTeller]

Okay, good. Glad you liked it, I'll try to see if I can revise it and make it better. It might take me awhile though.

[The StoryTeller]

We did this in creative writing. 20 of us brought in songs we liked and put up the lyrics. Then we went around the room and took lines or phrases, etc, we liked. Then we had to organize it into a poem, making it more our own, and becoming a lyric poem.