Ten Billion Tears (Leak)

Ten Billion Tears (Leak)

A Poem by Cordell
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another sample of my upcoming collection :)

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I cried a river you didn’t mind
You just swam across just fine
I cried an ocean the world has drowned
But yet you are still around
I cried you a waterbed
Yet you just slept
I drowned instead
My greatest fear

Ten Billion tears
And not even a glance
Ten Billion years
Felt like it had just past
Ten Billion tears
Coming down one by one
Ten Billion tears
Basically for fun
Te, te, ten billion tears

You rode by on a boat
Not a word, not a single note
Didn’t pass me a lifesaver
Whatever...

© 2009 Cordell


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I don't even know what to say for that.
"I cried a river you didn't mind
You just swam across just fine"
The emotion that poured out on this small line was somehow in it's own way, powerful.
The first stanza's emotions for its way of depicting a persons feelings and being hurt in the process was just simply amazing. I don't know how to explain how this made me feel, I'm extremly glad you posted this.

Amazing!
indie♥

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I would think this is quite good :) I like the first four lines and the middle part especially. In the last stanza, I would think "Not a word nor a note" would've seemed more fit :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


I enjoyed the last stanza very much: it was clever, whatever.
The rest though reminded me too much of Tori Amos's 1000 oceans, "These tears I've cried, I've cried a thousand oceans."

viva la

Posted 14 Years Ago


I don't even know what to say for that.
"I cried a river you didn't mind
You just swam across just fine"
The emotion that poured out on this small line was somehow in it's own way, powerful.
The first stanza's emotions for its way of depicting a persons feelings and being hurt in the process was just simply amazing. I don't know how to explain how this made me feel, I'm extremly glad you posted this.

Amazing!
indie♥

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Cordell
Cordell

CMD, PA



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Been writing poetry since 1992! It was a project for high school and ever since I loved it! My poems tend to be more gothic, and about suicide and depression and the darkside of life. Sometimes there .. more..

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