Thaw

Along with shivers comes a pain

A pain that clears the fog

The fog that has but blinded us

And slowed us to a slog

As I breathe the cool crisp air 

And feel the chill set in

I realize that the warmth before

Has me rotting from within

When my flesh begins to numb

I feel my thoughts return

And the film upon my eyes

Just now begins to burn

But once I close the door behind

And sink beneath the sheets

The bog will reign once more

Until I'm cast upon the streets

Reviews

[rottinghexgrl]

this is very beautiful. i love the way its put together.

[Inda]

Love how you add dimensions to your pieces , you're essentially speaking of someone who's jeading to bead and is in need of rest and warmth, but there's much more told here. Great job!

[Rosaria_V]

so captivating!!! I love your words. You truly have a way with them.

[Dark Rider]

Once again, you have me captured by words. Everything you wrote is but a 100% true. I wish I was able to write like this. Great job. :)

[Latifa]

Along with shivers comes a pain
A pain the clears the fog
The fog that has but blinded us
And slowed us to a slog
I enjoyed this part mostly and the meanings are well portrayed

[Ryan]

Great job! All your poems have such great flow, and you're really good at making them flow. It paints a great image of you "thawing". Love it, I can't wait for IWU with you and Grant!

[RainDancer1997]

This poem flows quite nicely:) I'm not sure if I'm right but in the second line is that first the meant to be a that? JW:) Though anyways great write:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A totalitarian piece really, quite a nice flow and well written!

[Rebecca Buller]

"The bog will reign once more
Until I'm cast upon the streets"

Excellent indeed! A very well written piece.