Father

Fathers are the least appreciated people in a family. I've written this for my father and this is long overdue.

Father

It must have been about 6 minutes 

Since I was out of my primary home

The nurse called you in, and you rushed

Funny, how big I was since I started as a genome

You held me, eyes brimming with tears

Not tears of  the bad sort,  just full of joy

Held me high up, proud of me already

You must have felt 'Look at him! This is my boy!'

I started growing up, with love from you and mum

Life was fair to us, we were happy

You used to be back home soon, to spend time with us

Never once were we unhappy

Then came my school, your work started getting heavy

You would spend less time than before, but I did not know why

We got used to this, and then the next best thing we knew happened

After a long time, I heard my little sister's first cry!

You took time again, to nurture this little princess

All four of us were together again for a long time

The little one started growing at an amazing pace

The only way to describe this wonderful feeling was sublime

We both grew up, both in age and wisdom

Thanks to your guidance and affection

You did not show out much, I still do not know 

How much burden and pain do you carry with perfection

You are not my superhero

You are my hero, that no superhero can be

With all your strength, wisdom, love for us always

Now that I've grown up, I won't let you down just you see

  Dear father, thanks in earnest 

You've taught us things no one else could 

Maybe one day in the future, I'll understand

The love, wisdom and joy of fatherhood

Reviews

[dan]

A wonderfully written tribute to your father, and fatherhood in general. One always hears many stories of bad parents, it's so refreshing to read a vivid description of a loving dad and mom. I am gladly accepting your friend request, but I ask that you send me read requests for the writes you'd like me to review; I have a hard time otherwise trying to keep up with all of my friends' writing. Nice to "meet you." take care...dan

[Sage]

Sure thing Dan, I'll definitely get to that! Thanks again

[Aswin R Prasad]

Woah! I really love my dad.. And this poem really expressed how you look up to your father!
Great poem! And loved second last stanza where you compared superheroes with your father.. ;)

Really enjoyed reading this! Keep writing ! :)

[TheLostMind]

This is a good read. Loved the last stanza.. Good job.

[Sage]

Thank you. :)

[Amber Lily]

This is lovely, fathers really do not get all the credit they deserve! I completely agree, they have half of the parenting load and work hard for their family. A great tribute to your father, and a great poem :)

[Sage]

Yes! Fathers are the Atlases that hold all the burden and it is such a poor thing that very few seem to respect them for who they are and what they do for their families. Thank you for appreciating this piece :)

[Amber Lily]

A lot of people give the mother more credit since they carry us for nine months and feed us with their bodies, but the dad has to provide a home which is equally important. Your welcome :)

[Sage]

True words. Well, life wouldn't have been possible without both the parents so it is pointless to argue who is more important.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry for your father.
"You are not my superhero
You are my hero, that no superhero can be
With all your strength, wisdom, love for us always
Now that I've grown up, I won't let you down just you see"
The above lines I do understand. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[CiNtsaLis]

D: breath taking.. really is.. amazing can't even describe how great this piece is.. *exhales* you are lucky. (:

[Sage]

Well, thank you! I sure am lucky! :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Simply beautiful and touching!
Emotive and vivid!
Your words took us on the journey with the plot..
Nice write!

PS: I think that in the forth stanza, in lines 4 & 7, you have missed a word.

[Sage]

Oh my! Thank you very much! I'll fix them. Thanks for liking it!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome.

[Norman 223]

This was a wonderful read. An autobiography, a dedication, and above all, a gentle poetic appreciation of paternal care and affection .

Norman

[Sage]

Thank you. I'm glad you liked reading it.

[Meeks]

There's this one Polish poet, quite popular recently, who wrote an epistle for his deceased grandfather. This kind of reminds me of that, very well done. Similar topics, differently written.
Particularly like the second to last stanza; the clear definement there stands out. Good job on this, hope you keep writing!

[Sage]

Thank you, I'm definitely going to keep writting. Can I know who's the other poet you were taking about?

[Meeks]

Jacek Kowalski, or Jack Smith in english. He's a modern bard: makes poems (not lyrics) and puts it into a song.
He does this in Polish though. I doubt it'll sound like anything in English.

[Sage]

Ah, I'll make sure I check it out. Maybe I'll be able to refine or find a better way of writing once I'm familiar with that.

[Emily]

That first stanza was just awesome!
I loved it!
Keep on writing!

[Sage]

Thank you! Keep reading!