Running from the Dark

Running From The Dark

I open my eyes, I see darkness everywhere

Standing all alone, standing on top made no sense

No fear, no joy, I'm just running out of air

Looks like I've stood at the top for too long, bound by a fence

Closed my eyes, looked for respite

Scenes of horror flash like torrents of rain

Thus faded the little light

And I had to re-live all the pain

Couldn't take it anymore, I started to run

Away from the land where there was no sun

I still remember my father say "Son,

You have two choices, you can learn or run."

Tired of all this, wanted to give up on life

On the top, I felt like nothing could go wrong

Alas! Who knew I'd never get rid of this strife

All those screams, would ring in my ear like a gong

It was my dream, to wield a mighty power

No regard for the consequences, went ahead and paid the price

Torn apart from friends, family and my lover

All I was left with were those miserable cries

Couldn't take it anymore, and I could not run

Away from the land where there was no sun

Steeled my heart, for the final downfall had begun

All that was left were my blown head and a bloody gun

Reviews

[Gregory Stires]

your writing is very good. i like how this poem perfectly displays an image of the scene. and how this poem display the struggle u feel and how i can imagine myself in ur place and the feeling this poem exerts are overwhelming. i also like how this poem keeps strong all throughout it and comes out with a good strong ending thats finishes it perfectly that makes this poem feel complete. another thing i like is how smooth this poem is.

[Sage]

Thank you! I appreciate you for taking your time and reading it. I hope you'll like my other works.

[BL]

This is very sad, in positive terms you have described your characters demise very well and pose the question in my mind, how can a writer write about their own death unless...

[Sage]

Unless? I'm really sorry I did not get the flow at the last part.

[BL]

Unless it isn't the end

[Sage]

Haha, that's an interesting thought. Maybe you're right. You just gave me an idea! Thanks a lot! :D

[Aswin R Prasad]

All your writings are relatable and that's what makes it interesting.. :)
Loved the usage of words in the third stanza. :)

[Sage]

Haha, thanks The best part about writing is that you can be anyone you want to and the words come naturally! :)