Beautiful Soul

Everyone has that one person that they are sure is their soulmate, a person with whom they have some sort of connection. Sometimes those feelings can be put in words.

Beautiful soul

You were standing there

With your lovely flowing hair

you seemed like a goddess, I swear

With you, I'd walk everywhere

You made my heart skip more than one beat

That, my lady is no ordinary feat

Your eyes, and your smile so sweet

And your heart, like a clean white sheet

I realised, in love I fell

Without you it wasn't hell, 

But you know Oh well,

Only on thoughts of you my heart would dwell

It did not matter if it was love or hate,

All I knew was that we were bound by fate

Seeing you, my heart rate elevates

Being with you was more than great!

In your heart, my love I had to chart

Then I decided and I dressed sharp,

I went ahead to steel my heart 

And steal your heart

Success! My boat finally reached your shore

You and I are now a complete whole

Together, we shall grow old

For you are my beautiful soul

Reviews

[Daisy Ackerman]

A very sweet poem on a popular but meaningful theme. I particularly love the last two lines. Also your use of "steel" and "steal" in successive lines was a very good play on words. It does a good job of portraying someone who must brace oneself for the worst before they go in for love, which is something that I know I feel when I really like someone.

[Sage]

Glad you can relate.

[Riddhi]

Hey! That is really a sweet poet and yes i can say that you are an honest write who expresses feelings so beautifully....Keep it up and thanks for sharing..

[Sage]

Thank you! :)

[Angel of the devil]

very sweet, the name of this poem fits this poem perfectly. I love the last line "For you are my beautiful soul" so sweet

[Sage]

Thank you! :)

[Angel of the devil]

your welcome sage

[zunie frost]

i can't believe the way you wrote this !! i love this
it have a soft flow . the most outstanding piece i must say you are real talented dear friend
10000 % ratings as always !!!

[Sage]

Thank you zunie! That was really good of you :)

[zunie frost]

welcome dear friend !!!

[CiNtsaLis]

"It did not matter if it was love or hate,
All I knew was that we were bound by fate"

GASP* (covers mouth) she must be more than beautiful.. *smiles* It's gorgeous

[Sage]

Haha, thank you! :D

[CiNtsaLis]

*smiles* She's a lucky person. (:

[Sage]

Well, I'll tell her that! :)

[CiNtsaLis]

*smiles brightly* she deserves to know (:

[Greg Agee]

I love your work. I see heart and depth in your style. In my opinion, I think the beauty of your message may be getting held back somewhat by rhyme and that is not unusual under rules. I would really love to see what you could do with this in fluid prose. I do love your work. Consider it a fans request. I'm surely not complaining ! You are very good at rhyming. I am wrong everyday so if you don't feel my opinion is on target. No problem, it's just an opinion.This is an "A" review. Peace

[Sage]

You sir, have made an extremely valid point. The rhyme might hold the message back by a bit. I'll write a fluid prose next, consider it as a token of appreciation for your encouragement. Please check my other pieces too (though they are rhyming verses too). I hope you'll like them.

[Greg Agee]

Thank you so much for your eloquence. Look forward to it

[mou]

written in a beautiful way.very nice

[Sage]

Thank you! :)

[DeerInHeadlights]

you are really good at rhyming. that is something I do not have the patience to do so much.. I really like how you used the words steel and steal in the same stanza.. good work. soul mates are often.. such an odd thing- soul recognition. I cant really describe what happens. I remember being told that "we are kindred souls" and it is true.. you can tell in a lot of my writing that I write of that connection. it touches you and always will be with you, regardless..

[Sage]

True. When you're in a position to feel that sort of a connection, it feels like you're suddenly blessed and you learn to see things in a different way.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Hehehehe. Brought back some great memories. :')
mostly pain now...but it's a goddamn good feeling, while it lasts. :)
Very well done.

[Sage]

Thanks again!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

my pleasure

[Leran Vakem]

This poems reminds me of the traditional sonnet but yet with a mixture of a modern sonnet.
This poem show and feel like a fusion between old and new just like the binding of two souls coming together, forsaking their old paths to walk a new path together.
Well written with a very good rhythm. I really enjoyed reading it.

L.V.

[Sage]

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.