Beautiful Soul

Everyone has that one person that they are sure is their soulmate, a person with whom they have some sort of connection. Sometimes those feelings can be put in words.

Beautiful soul

You were standing there

With your lovely flowing hair

you seemed like a goddess, I swear

With you, I'd walk everywhere

You made my heart skip more than one beat

That, my lady is no ordinary feat

Your eyes, and your smile so sweet

And your heart, like a clean white sheet

I realised, in love I fell

Without you it wasn't hell, 

But you know Oh well,

Only on thoughts of you my heart would dwell

It did not matter if it was love or hate,

All I knew was that we were bound by fate

Seeing you, my heart rate elevates

Being with you was more than great!

In your heart, my love I had to chart

Then I decided and I dressed sharp,

I went ahead to steel my heart 

And steal your heart

Success! My boat finally reached your shore

You and I are now a complete whole

Together, we shall grow old

For you are my beautiful soul

Reviews

[Daisy Ackerman]

A very sweet poem on a popular but meaningful theme. I particularly love the last two lines. Also your use of "steel" and "steal" in successive lines was a very good play on words. It does a good job of portraying someone who must brace oneself for the worst before they go in for love, which is something that I know I feel when I really like someone.

[Sage]

Glad you can relate.

[Emily]

I loved it!
One of my new favorites of yours!!
Keep it up!

[Deboleena]

Beautiful presentation. I have natural inclination toward this genre. Thank you.

[Greg Agee]

Fallen unto one... True love rules, and abides
The fact that you say it all and ryhme, in time, quite sublime. Il review your work anytime, Sir Sage

[Celie Rose]

Deep emotional poem. The depths and conviction of your love for her are meaningful, pure , honest and limitless. 5th stanza last two lines,"I went ahead to steel my heart And steal your heart." steel...Mentally prepared, brace to steal her heart. Well expressed and written.

[Sarah King]

absolute Perfection. I enjoyed reading it. keep on Sage!

[Sage]

Thank you Sarah! I'm happy you enjoyed it.

[Sarah King]

you're welcome. thank you for sharing your nice poem.

[Willard Wells]

Beautiful words of love, from discovery to winning. All within a few short verses. Well done.

[Sage]

Thank you! The best part is that it is a complete journey!

[TheMalady]

All I can say is that, this is still one of your beautiful poem-song! This time, I'm quite thrilled and happy for the happy ending. :)

[Sage]

Thanks, I guess I can work on both types- light and dark, eh?

[TheMalady]

Yup! now that's an interesting twist. I would like to see how you accomplish it. :)

[Sage]

I guess I'll write a poem that has both of these elements. I just need a subject now.

[TheMalady]

Now that's creativity! I'll look forward to it! :)

[θεά]

What a darling love poem this is! Written intimately to a loved one, it reads well and is able to evoke a feeling of romance and happiness from the reader.

Thanks for sharing, will go through your other works,

Best,
M.

[Sage]

Thanks Mallika! I did write this piece in happiness so I'm happy that it carried the same feeling I wanted it to convey!

[Mary Helda]

Wow,,this is so beautiful and sweet...you really did portray real loce..it is not exagerated..just real....

[Sage]

Thank you fellow poetess! :)

[Ellen Kolman]

OMG! I love this so much...you have captured what falling in love is truly like...you are an amazing and creative poet...keep writing....

[Sage]

Thank you Ellen! I'm happy you found it creative and good to read :)