Violent Blue

Stars twinkled bright
on descending twilight
gentle zephyr blew

I dance to you
upon crippled feet

Lips stitched shut
I cannot speak

Forgotten vows
and dead devotions

Do I really need to write
a ballad of the w***e
that kept her legs open

Muscles tense
as common sense
hustles leaving lines
illogical unheard explanations

As I battle my thoughts
and come to grips

Mental terms

Penned concerns

Words strike

Reality burned

Anger is today's mood

I fight too pretty
and I love too ugly

Men are s**t
and girls are icky

Abandoned
damned
to be alone

Cold metal
Beretta

Hidden beneath
loves disguise

My veins
they pulse
and pound
in violent blue

In a flash of lost control

Blood drops
Shattered parts

The deepening
shades of me

At 3 pm the dead hour
we journeyed to our end

Stars twinkled bright
on descending twilight

If thoughts
could yield
verse would end

By Samantha Campbell

Author's Note

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inspired by a dream lol

Reviews

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

@Trish D. Thanks yeah maybe just a little bit of shock value but mainly I just love to make people think and if it means doing it with a little bit of a shock to open eyes than its a need be or maybe its just my style lol IDK I think you give me too much credit I dont think I'm that smart I just can convey my feeling well and I do surprise myself sometimes after I read my finished poem its like no way did I just write that sometimes its like poetry has taken control of me sort of like Ive been possessed haha I think Ive even posted a poem about just that
YOU ARE NOT ignorant Never think that way

[patricia]

anger fueling passion...you have a way of disturbing me with core lines which most would tone down and lighten. I suspect you like to shock, maybe. I don't think I am intelligent enough to quite understand some of your work, it is times like this, my ignorance annoys me. Thankyou for the privilege. You are awesome.

[Enigma]

Wow. Excellent penning of such intense emotions. Was it an anxiety dream that you had? :P

Anyway, well penned. Keep up the great work. :)

[Lily Mae]

What the hell did you eat before you went to bed??? ;) I love all your work and this time you've switched it up a bit with taking us a bit on that other side of the sexual experience.... a bit of the dark side.. excellent as always...xo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This dark and eerie, one that sparks a negative connotation of the opposite sex, and leaves me wondering if this is a cryptic form lashing out...very thought provoking...Very creative writing, Samantha. Well done!

[Jibey]

A surreal dream - full of images of violence and desolation, of violence and whoredom... some striking phrases especially 'the w***e that kept her legs open'... It reminded me of King Lear's speech in the storm when he railed against the smell f sex amongst other things... This is your darker side, Samantha, and it is as shiningly brilliant and steaming as fresh s**t..if you see what I mean :-)

[*~*Butterfly Kisses*~*]

Nice flow and deeply well written. Nicely done!

~anna rose

[TawnyBlueStar]

wow
the flow to this is amazing :D I love how the pace
begins to quicken and the rhymes work really well :)
'Lips stitched shut' was one of my favourite lines.
gives the poem a lot more depth :)
Love it :D

[Hannah Paige]

i really like the flow and feel of this. the wording and rhyme scheme you chose worked really well.