The Sting of Love

My eyes have cast
many a lustful glance
in your direction.

I grow weak at the sight of you

My heart quickens
and I cannot breath.

Do you know how
each of your unique parts
speak of hidden pleasures?

How you make me a prisoner
to a motion such as mine?

You've seduced me
with my own thoughts. . .

Oh how I ache for you
ache in a way that
is foreign to my body.

I long for your touch
and I long for the first
pleasurable pain of penetration
the sting of love.

You've cut into me
to taste my blood.

But the worst of woes
is to never know love.

By Samantha Campbell

VirginPoet

Reviews

[Bare trees]

I'd have to agree with the others, a beautiful poem. and WOW!

[light and ashes]

Beautiful poem

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

I like this other side of you. A shorter version but a unique side of your diversity

[Allie :)]

I like this, but it's much too simple.
You have a large vocabulary, and you like to flaunt it, but doesn't make your piece seem any more complex.
I suggest you go back, and attempt to make your lines longer, add a little more detail, and a lot more figurative language, just to sum up what all needs to be added.
It's not terrible, by an means, it;s just not unique.
There are elements in this piece that I definetly like, I just would like to see this edited and reposted.

[TJ]

This is excellent. Theres so much genuine emotion and passion in this. And the imagery is magnificent of course. Great work

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A pleasant and revealing look, wel done, good read.

[Helpless]

woow

[HopelesslyDevoted]

your writing is become my favorite to read on writerscafe i must say, you rock!

[Letemdangle]

Wow, for a young lady to write in this way, is so honest and courageous.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

lol its not about a vampire its about loosing and not loosing your virginity