Gasping

The weight of my heart

is crushing my lungs

into a sweet oblivion

of poetic torture

While my skin scars

beneath tears

marring my soul

My bones crumble

into volcanic ash

Everything I am

Everything I was

Everything

I could have been

Is lost in every

facile breath you take

And inside you

within that iceberg rib cage

lies a heart that will never

know how to love

By Samantha Pruitt

Author's Note

Facile ... (especially of a theory or argument) appearing neat and comprehensive only by ignoring the true complexities of an issue; superficial, Shallow ect ect

Reviews

[Adam M. Snow]

Great imagery, a fantastic flow. Well penned.

[Celestial Witch Child]

"My bones crumble into volcanic ash"... That is such a great line. I can't help but be reminded of a phoenix. I love this piece. Wonderful work. Keep it up.

[Echoes of Eros]

You know how to shape words like soft strings or sharp knives, splitting open mind and soul. Your writing only ever grows more poignant. xo

[Alex Cook]

I enjoy your work. You have a lot of talent.

[MrsBear]

Powerful, strong words. Reminds me a lot of all the crap I face in my life lol

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

An old ended thread created by you I suspect and all over my wc page here you are leaving that link and claiming me and wordman and others are fake pages there to keep up drama how stupid are you I mean really get a life

[Chris]

smiling here - that was the definition of facile as I took it within the poem. A power-full image you presented of an unmatched pairing.

[Briana O'Connor]

The pain within each line is so entrancing and palpable. I was completely drawn into each word. The message was so intense. I absolutely loved it! Thank you for sharing.

[Jennie Baron]

You fluently express the powerful and sometimes all-consuming nature of love, and then that last stanza hits with a punch, expressing the hopelessness of loving someone who can't return those feelings. Lovely writing (again)!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the artwork and powerful words dear Poet.
"And inside you
within that iceberg rib cage
lies a heart that will never
know how to love"
When we become ice. Need a tropical love to make us heat up again. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote