Obsidian Heart

Atramentous Edge

She douses her rusted spikes
in hell's nine infernos

And stabs them serenely
into her pallid iris

She howls in agony
thrust in Death's ravenous throes
and screams diabolically
in the dark splendor of her crisis

Silver specks
of shattered dreams
slit her pitch-black veins

Carving a tale
of betrayal
into her web
of wilting
bones

Only an entrancing flicker
of demonic shadows remains

Burying what's left
of her beneath their
blood-splattered thrones

A winged dungeon
of darkness
seeps into her
twisted brain

As she tugs at her
golden bracelet
a gift from the skies

Chunks of severed flesh
enmesh her nails
like a cursed
night's stain

Melanoid nightmares
tattoo her wrists
as the golden
hue dies

Torn in limbo
between two dimensions
of demons and of shadows

She counts
the demented beasts
mauling her crumbling soul apart

And she sighs
with resignation
as she floats through
death's meadow

She dives into
the worst of three
her obsidian fading heart



By Samantha Pruitt

Author's Note

Melanoid ... dark colored

Reviews

[Wynter Ignatius]

We only see the light when we are in the darkness and we often forget that until we are actually there.

This hopefully is a passing situation for you.

[Daydreamer]

Catchy,provoking you to vent to yourself! Lovely :)
perhaps you could check out my profile sometime?

[Konigin]

Yes. Dark colored indeed. It made my heart frantically race and my eyes widen with each word. It made me lean forward and brought me to the edge of my seat. It sent shivers skittering along my spine... It was dark and chilling. Vivid. I may have a nightmare tonight... :) Well Done Samantha.

[Mark]

Yikes! I'm sleeping with the light on tonight!!!! Well done. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

My favorite books are Dante and Virgil. You had me at the nine infernos. I like the thoughts and the description in the poem. Had the feel of the ancient writers. For some Hell is a good place. I'm going to Purgatory Inn myself. Don't want either hell or heaven. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[kublakhan27]

Wow, this is an absolute feast of chilling and frenetic imagery...I read Dante many moons ago, and even though most of the specifics have slipped my mind, there are a lot of images here that put me in mind of that story. But this is totally different and unique...every line is like a whip on the reader's back, which I have no problem with when it comes to poetry...one thing about poetry, it isn't always pretty, nor should it be, at least that's how I've always looked at it haha Awesome work :)

[Chris Micha]

Truly a dark dark piece! Very intense through every verse. Brilliantly done!

[Glass Heart Inc]

Did not like this to be honest it made me feel uneasy. The images I get from it is just horrible. But it's written really well and you're a great writer. The feeling I got from this really means you're good for being able to describe such a horrific story in a poem.

[Margo Seuss]

So painted in black this poem is! I can see this horrendous scene all so clear and morbid in my head! You language and words pairs are fantastic! "Melanoid nightmares" A very good write. The only line that didn't entirely work in my head was "and she screams diabolically." I think this is only because the word diabolical makes me think of a goofy villain, which then detracts from serious disturbing quality of this work. A mere change of the word would fix this. Just a suggestion! Otherwise this was perfectly grusome!

[daemok]

So yeah... this is the first piece I have EVER added to my library. It's got that style I'm looking for and never knew someone could produce it -I was clearly wrong. Great job.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

Wow Thank you I feel honored now lol