Heavy Heart Beats Primal Rhythms

I read
the music
on your skin
beat out
primal
rhythms
like
heart
beats

I want to
embrace
those senses
as you lose
yourself
in the creativity
of your passions
I want to touch
those words as your
pulse beats
at the tip
of my pen

Edge of my heart
a verse repeats
at the side of my lip
a tone vibrates

I am in love

But

Am

I

Worth

Losing

Poetry is
heartbroken words
fainted expressions
initially sentences
trembled
finally
twisted and
fragmented with
metaphors
hidden
meanings
lost

In every
Heart Beats
Primal Rhythms



By Samantha Pruitt

Reviews

[Anne Lockhart]

This poem really blew me away. There are a great deal of poems out there that are like this, but this one in particular spoke to me. The use of spaces in between words in the fourth stanza added a dramatic effect, and to me, it's one of the strongest points in your poem. However, I believe that the strongest is when you said "Poetry is / heartbroken words / fainted expressions / initially sentences / trembled / finally / twisted and / fragmented with / metaphors / hidden / meanings / lost". I can relate to this illustration. You're right when you say that poetry is heartbroken words and fainted expressions. At least that's what it is for me most of the time. Well done! This is an incredible piece.

[Dewella~Vintella]

Wonderfully written, lots of raw emotion that you weaved into each line to create a beautiful piece.
The rhythm and flow never wavered or lost trace throughout the lines. Job well done.

-Dew

[TurtleNamedPeanut]

This is just ...wow. This was beautifully done.

[Raymond Federle]

Very pure and raw. You capture, perhaps, the truest sense of poetic emotion. Well done! :)

[Trace]

Primal is such a great way to describe our animal instinct that drives us.
you have done a very nice job in describing that drive.

Very nice, Trace

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

Much thanks Trace I have written another poem with the primal theme its called primal poetry if you would like to read it let me know and I can link you to it on here

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

but it is mature

[MsJewel]

Great flow and word choice in this well written poem. I love the last stanza that sums everything up so well. Great writing! I enjoyed this very much.

:) Julie

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

a perfectly paced piece, well done, good read.

[Michael Stevens]

Another fine poem, Samantha!

[wordman]

you did a great job on this it all came together to form a beautiful write

and congratulations on the baby boy

[Sasha Leigh]

This is very beautiful. I read it aloud just to hear it--twice.

[Lyn Anderson]

A very effective poem in its shape, timing, imagery and word usage - bordering on mature, but I think you're safe.:)