Heavy Heart Beats Primal Rhythms

I read
the music
on your skin
beat out
primal
rhythms
like
heart
beats

I want to
embrace
those senses
as you lose
yourself
in the creativity
of your passions
I want to touch
those words as your
pulse beats
at the tip
of my pen

Edge of my heart
a verse repeats
at the side of my lip
a tone vibrates

I am in love

But

Am

I

Worth

Losing

Poetry is
heartbroken words
fainted expressions
initially sentences
trembled
finally
twisted and
fragmented with
metaphors
hidden
meanings
lost

In every
Heart Beats
Primal Rhythms



By Samantha Pruitt

Reviews

[Anne Lockhart]

This poem really blew me away. There are a great deal of poems out there that are like this, but this one in particular spoke to me. The use of spaces in between words in the fourth stanza added a dramatic effect, and to me, it's one of the strongest points in your poem. However, I believe that the strongest is when you said "Poetry is / heartbroken words / fainted expressions / initially sentences / trembled / finally / twisted and / fragmented with / metaphors / hidden / meanings / lost". I can relate to this illustration. You're right when you say that poetry is heartbroken words and fainted expressions. At least that's what it is for me most of the time. Well done! This is an incredible piece.

[Mike Emil]

this has good strong power
good for theater
you are invited
HAI!!!

[FlatLineBeauty]

Gorgeous. Thank you for sharing. xo Winter

[Sue Hart]

A beautiful description of how the soul creates. Loved it.

[Ruth]

Graceful and poised with enough to drive the reader over the edge into thoughtful explorations...wound tightly...woven intricately...excellent piece x

[kublakhan27]

The relationship between art and romance is seamless, to the point where they often become one in the same. I love how you've brought the two elements together here, and made them one. Beautiful work.

[Winter Renee Vineyard]

Amazing......beautiful flow of words throughout the poem...

[child of God]

Wonderful just wonderful it has good flow it is a pleasures to read your writing

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Your words aren't lost on me. I have had that twitch in my jowl, just at the corner of my mouth...Had my girl wonder why I was still writing sad songs and poems even as happy as we were together. Was it adumbration? I see you...But what do YOU mean, by being worth losing?

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

I dont know that to say but thank you deeply and for the song you wrote ... as of right now I dont know anyone who could play it for me. .... But Am I Worth Loosing holds a bigger message that was missed till you sorta found it the whole poem was born from that feeling and I cant really say what it means out here for all to read

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Well, I appreciate your clues. It stuck in my mind about this poem. I can tell there is something to it. As to the song, I can write many more. I actually have much less trouble with music than words. I have been fighting to improve my lyrics for years.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

Ive been told that I should try my hand at writing songs as many of my poems could be songs but yeah I just can't lol I have tried and I suck at it.

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Maybe you just need someone to give you a little melody! Often the real key is just to open yourself up to making the words into part of the song and not part of a poem. For example, rarely would you say, "yeah, hey, yeah, oooooh" or that kind of thing in a poem, but it works in music. How often do you say your poetry out loud? If you say it, then try saying it in different voices. Then try singing it. I think it will inform your poetry (if you haven't tried it already). You may well be a better poet than I am, but I have spent a long time working on TRYING to write lyrics, so I at least have a sense for HOW to do it...It is up to you though, consider it a challenge! You can take it on if you like. I don't think it can hurt, but I wouldn't say you appear to be in need of help either...