Dear Heart

Dear
heart

My heart
is your heart

Was I wrong to let my hands
touch the things that hurt

To feel the ridges of scars
left marring your flesh

To feel your broken heartbeat
thumping heavy in your chest

To taste the salty Seas
in your tears
as my lips
kiss your
waves

Tell me why
my blue eyes burn
with a desire
no other
shall know

None shall
know my
virgin tight
depths but you

None shall know
the four chambers
of my heart
nor feel its
intensity

Why was I created
a creature so different
as a mythological mermaid
swimming in seas of ancient lore

You found me a hopeless being
with scars that can never heal
hoping through love and depth
you could make me feel

But memories like razorblades
have left him scarred
his heart shredded
shattered like
fine glass

His pieces float on
in treturous seas
evading loves grasp

As the mermaid
searches for the broken
remnant's of her love

The waves of her heart bleed
Beethoven's symphony

Causing whirlpools
in her eyes

To rage
and claw at raw
emotion

Creating little
tsunami's as her heart
earthquakes

And hot lava eruptions
to spew forth pure love

But his eyes of red pour tears
of acid a black rain

That cause her
scales to blaze and glow

Because she loves
a creature created for agony

Her home

The fallen chambers
of his heart and soul

The sea his tears



By Samantha & Stephen Pruitt

Author's Note

This was a collaboration with my husband and fellow poet on this site please read and review his work

http://www.writerscafe.org/itz_JuggZ

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Our hearts are yours also my darling, a crafted and well written piece, well done to both of you x

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. A beautiful journey in your words. I like the way your strong description led the reader to a good ending. Love is pleasure and struggle. Those people who hold on tighter. Are rewarded with joy and days of happiness. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[FlatLineBeauty]

I loved this. You both did an amazing job together. xo Winter

[Sami Khalil]

To rage
and claw at raw
emotion

"Creating little
tsunami's as her heart
earthquakes

And hot lava eruptions
to spew forth pure love"

I like the product of this collaboration...Bravo

[wordman]

I guess no one understands the emotion that led you to this beautiful write
passion,love and pain isn't this real love

[Pete Langley]

I`m sorry to have to admit I`m not a fan of this piece, Samantha, having read it a few times. ....it starts well enough, and introducing a marine theme would have provided a nice analogy had you perhaps included more original similes rather than the rather overused ones....and maintained it rather than switching to other metaphors. Centralising the poem actually weakens the piece if the phrasing is weak. One or two grammatical and spelling errors (treacherous?) don`t help, either.
At first, I thought I wouldn`t review this, but then decided that that wouldn`t help you. This is only meant to be helpful to you. Warmly, Pete

[Mike Emil]

you have vicious notions
enough to love someone
and rip them in to pieces
a welcome addition
to kohlrabi theater
HAI!!!

[Mike Emil]

your husband is welcome to join the theater to
but he must bring brandy...or saki...don't be cheap and buy gin
HAI!!!