Seconds Minutes Hours

Its like holding my breath
as my lungs collapse
Ill love you
till my
death
rattle

And my heart
ceases to beat
and slowly fades
into the abyss
of he left me

Days pass
like eternity
in an hour

By Samantha Campbell

Author's Note

inspired by Steve

Reviews

[M Sanders]

The words you chose were nicely place. I do feel a disconnect at the end that is just my personal opinion. Over all not bad:)

[Vivi]

Got the feeling your soul has been stabbed.
Words carried out the sorrow very well.

[smilempsn]

Short poem.... but its deep than.. 'Second...Minutes...Hours...' :) :)

[chaotic katie]

very captivating piece, nicely written.

[B-poet]

Conveying and illustrating a distinctive feeling for undying love is what makes this poem very special. Great job here. :)

[Chris]

unending moments... yeah, been there

[unsavable_soul]

Strong and subtle,
This says a lot with a little. It leaves the reader shadowed by the ideas, though I will say it also the intent was a little lost on me. I always give honesty. I like this.
Sincerely
Chris

[Death Girl]

I liked the image that you have for this poem. I really love this great write.

[minnie:)]

The image made me jump a little when I looked at itXD
The poem is great, the rhythm the words are great!! :)
~Minnie

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

lol yeah the pic did the same to me ... I love how it represents the feeling I have of not wanting to let go and letting go

I was very emotional when I wrote this and Ive just now started taking full breaths

Thank you for your review ... Everyone's reviews mean a lot to me cause my words will never fade nor disappear un read and hidden away like I use to keep my writings a secret

[minnie:)]

No problem, all of your poems are really good (except some of them make guys go crazy)

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

lol they make me go crazy that's why Ive got to get them outa my head

[SlightlyHurt]

After he left last night in a fit of rage...
to run to you.
after we made love monday and the night before last night
telling neither of us truths
he called me and told me he left you
and I am not privy to his joke
he is playing with emotions that are not meant to be
and he has blocked us from comunication
so take that as you want it. It is the truth coming from me.
sorry about your loss but I am not going to sit on the sidelines while he breaks our hearts.

[minnie:)]

how did that get there? ^

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

lol that is a crazy b***h that is stalking me online she is his X Im sorry lol I swear some women are just ugh ... Ima be nice and not say what I thinking ... she has even called me many times and I wont answer and come to find out she is making death threats against me I have reported her here and blocked her

[minnie:)]

whoa, creepy....................0.o i think I'll block her

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

good idea I wanted to tell her that Steve and I are engaged but hell I dont want her tracking me down at home ... she should know I have a gun and I know how to use it she even flipped out on his car beat it up tried to bust his windows its all just out of hand

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

oh another thing she stole all but one of his poem books

[minnie:)]

0.o wow, that's messed up. How old are you by the way. Just wondering :p

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

Im 33 he is 25 she is gonna be 40 and has 5 kids or something like that

[minnie:)]

That's not her loving him, or any kind of emotion like that. That is obsession. She needs to move on. Holy shiz! Your pic makes you look like your're a freaking teen!!!!!!!!!!!!! God you look so young!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

I know they were together for 4 years really 5 ... she is a DOG and it grosses me out to think he was with her I mean gag me cause I wanna puke ..... She just got use to having him to using him

and wow thank you I get it a lot but its always nice to hear lol