Once Again We Swam

 

It took one question

One reason was given why I needed to stay

Control

Gaining back empowerment

 

Filled with a different kind of chill

A familiar one

The book dropped to the floor

Buttons opened

Little Red Riding Hood lost her cape

Seeing the wolves teeth were larger and

Hungrier than ever

She too was so thirsty

 

Item by item the floor was a sea of things you find in the closet

Once again we swam

Surrounded by the water

Engulfed by the weightlessness

 

Your eyes never left me

Laughing

Smiling

Leaving you by the shore

 

I smile when I think of you

 

 

 

Reviews

[Belinda Rice]

very great write this is my favoret part

Once again we swam

Surrounded by the water

Engulfed by the weightlessness



Your eyes never left me

Laughing

Smiling

Leaving you by the shore



I smile when I think of you


just the feeling of the love, so thank you for sharing this great write very well put together...i hope to see more.

[Brandon]

Nice!! I really love the vagueness in the poem. I feel like I understand, but at the same time not. Beautiful!

~Brandon~

[SweetPeachesAlways]

A very powerful write...emotional, thought-provoking to say the least. Great job!

[mysticgmekeepr]

This was good. I liked it, the way you wove a fairy tale into the telling

[*** Hey Jude***]

This is a beautiful piece that reachs into the depths of the heart and touchs the soul! ~ Jude :-) xo

[Cece]

wow overflow of imagery
overwhelming beauty
all from one question

what can cause
a flash to a fairy tale
life that is not a fairy tale

i feel release
its good to gain control
totally felt in the heart

[shadadakiya]

very deep and to the point but also from the heart very good write thank you for sharing it hugs

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Very elusive to me also .. i like it and i love the last line ' i smile wheni think of you',, i smile when i think of a few people .. nice conveyance of your feelings.. and it made me feel ..

Chloe
xoxo

[Wolfwind Words]

This was really good! It was sensual but elusive, empassioned yet calm. I liked how it all flowed together really well.

The end left me feeling refreshed like i had just been in a bath.... great imagery!

:)

[Mark Pearce]

Once again, the right amount of intrigue and suggestiveness.

Great imagery too.