more than a man

more than a man

A Poem by Danielle Asher
"

just a little on the depressed side- things are not so good lately. but i am hanging in

"

 

The only way to save myself is give him what he wants

He deletes me from his heart

I delete him from everywhere else

There is nothing else to see

I will no longer read these words

 

When you love

You love forever

Friendship is the most important thing you can give someone

I guess I was always his friend

He was never mine

That is what I have to accept

I guess that is why he wants me to go

 

I will never be easy

I will never be light

There will always be a weight around us no matter how much I want it not to be there

But to ignore me…

I guess he always did

That’s the problem

 

It’s all just crashing down

Around me pieces of things I used to know

My voice cracks

And I am standing on the stage

In the lights

Of an empty room

Singing my heart out

For no one

With nothing

 For nothing

 

Now I see why I need the pills

I wanted to feel

But it makes me worthless

 

Lost

Among the missing pieces

Of a life

© 2008 Danielle Asher


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This just says it all doesn't it?? One sided relationships are always so heartbreaking
and very hard to understand when you are the one holding on to the feelings!!
I've felt this way so can relate to what you are saying here.

I hope things have brightened up for you since you posted this piece of work!

Posted 17 Years Ago


*hugs* you know I have felt this way a few weeks ago because of a guy, and I still do. Only he was too stupid to actually realize he hurt me. *shrugs* men are idiots.

Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I too remember those times when all is ripped away, when all that is left is the very essence of your soul. I too remember losing a life I liked with nothing to new to replace it. Very well written. your phrasing flows freely walking the reader through your experience. Good imagery, compelling thoughts. Death of illusion, of hope, are also the beginnings of realization for all of us who dare to go there. Peace...

Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very poignant and heartfelt. I am so sorry you are feeling this way. Depression is a cloud hanging over, it hangs over me too sometimes. Your poem is really beautiful, please feel better soon. xx

Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

-That's so very sad. There really ain't any way around the ocean of understanding between people.
Love not received, love given, what could I say about it, save that the hard work of survival eventually dulls pain.
Well done.



Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very sad write, but also very expressive. Keep your head up. It only hurts for a time being. Then it ends. even when we think it never will. I've been there, I say it from experience.

Posted 17 Years Ago


This is hauntingly heartbreaking! Fantastically crafted, and emotionally resonant.

Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very sad write indeed....... Hang on life is a roller coaster hun . The ending is haunting lost among the missing pieces of a life.. I feel ya here

take care, cry a little laugh more

Michelle

Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Danielle Asher
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