Inarticulate me

a poem confessing my feelings to someone I won't ever be with. I feel like there is a lot of sentiment people can relate to in this though. (no1knowsViolet collection)

 

Inarticulate for you

The honest fee talking girl

Is silent, other then some hints thrown in here and there

Not that I really know what I feel or what it is all about

2 months later and I am drawn to the closeness of us

And you are drawn to the closeness of old comfort

Words that are spoken lead to confusion

And question marks float in the air

Seeing your eyes across a room surge through me

And I see your face everywhere

I was asked what I would do with the last 10 seconds of my life and your eyes

Were all I could see

It surprised me as much as it is surprising you as you read this

I did not realize that was how strong these feelings were

You are the link to something inside my soul

You are He

And I am inarticulate

Not at all truthful about the way I feel for you

Not even to myself

But I am old

And you are somewhere new

I am sure you believe it is not I or at least not supposed to be

Maybe I just want what I can not have

But even Andrew’s intuition said you were special and

He is the last person ready to give me up

Reviews

[J.Sin]

This poem really caught my eye as I was using the "Discover" feature on this site and I am so happy that I clicked through to it. So much wonderful imagery in it, such as: "Words that are spoken lead to confusion
And question marks float in the air" and "You are He
And I am inarticulate". The poem itself is direct and specific, yet it allows for the reader to manipulate the ideas and make it about themselves as well. A very well-written piece. Bravo.

Ah, but I did notice that you may have a typo at the beginning (I am unsure if it is meant the way it is posted or not, but I thought I would mention it anyway)... in the second line, I think you meant to say FREE talking girl, not FEE talking girl (unless it truly is about money).

Cheers! Keep up the amazing writing.

[JC Fox]

Another wonderful poem filled with heartbreak and wonderful imagery

[Emily B]

wow! So true and honest. You know these poems with such deep emotions are rarely shared with the object. Even from us old married women, we're chickens about sharing our true feelings with that person. We can share them all over the world except where they matter.

[Stonewall]

I have read a lot of poems about teenagers in love on this site, but this is one of the few that has reminded me how I sometimes used to feel sitting in a classroom.

Wasn't looking too hard, but one typo I noticed was 'serge' should be 'surge'.