The Man I Loved

Poem contains themes of depression, break-ups and suggests of suicide. Leave me a review please and remember to read the note to the reviewers! Sorry that the poem is short! Enjoy...

The Man I Loved

The night was cold and getting dark,

As I walked alone through the forest park.

And my heart hurt as I felt lonely,

Because he was my one and only.

The trees shook while the harsh wind blew,

I sobbed quietly, I guess our love was not true.

Already, the man I loved had moved on,

He was far away now and long gone.

I still cannot believe he broke my heart,

I should never have loved him from the start.

He walked away from me, Would I ever know why?

It soon was clear that on this night, I wanted to die.

By Violet Stone

Author's Note

This was the first poem I ever wrote when I started getting into doing poetry so It may not be one of my best but I would really appreciate a review to hear what people think about it. Thank you for reading!

Reviews

[Gabby Nieves]

hmm dark and dreary setting, I always love poems that are on the darker side. My favorite poet is Edgar Allan Poe, so obviously darker settings always catch my eye. I loved the imagery here and I could feel the emotion, I've been in this situation before so I know how it feels to be heart broken and feeling like all you want to do is die

[Violet Stone]

Thanks for the review :) I'm glad you liked it and I enjoy that kind of setting too so I tried my best to do that in this poem. I know the feeling too and I'm happy someone else has felt this way before as I have, but I hope you're okay. Never the less, Thanks for the compliments :)

[Gabby Nieves]

You're welcome and I'm much better now haha thanks, I hope you are too. I'm not sure why all of the review didn't post? But I also said I hope all is well with that story/novel I think you told me about??

[Violet Stone]

That's good to know and thank you too. I'm better now too lol. And yea, all is well! I have been reading though the first couple of chapters recently, making sure it was perfect and I was taking pictures for the novels cover because I will be posting some chapters on here soon so I hope you're looking forward to it cause I'm nervous XD lol

[Gabby Nieves]

I am looking forward to it! I cant wait for you to post some of it c:

[Violet Stone]

Lol I'm really glad to hear that :3 By the way, would you mind if I gave you a mention as I sort of note thingy in the novel? I want to tell people to check out the poem you did that sounded like my novel :)

[Gabby Nieves]

Omg I wouldn't mind at all haha, go for it

[Violet Stone]

Lol, thank you :)

[Moonie]

It is pretty good for someone's first poem ever. Also, in the fifth line, shouldn't it be "trees".

[misha]

Heartbreak can be terrible, especially when you're the one who is left broken. This was a sad write full of emotion. I can connect to this piece and it pulled at my heart. Great write.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

A deep sadness is evident here.
We all know that empty feeling when this happens.
A great piece of writing.

[Black Star Adept]

Love the darkness of the poem. Keep it up!!!

[NotaBene]

Once you love someone, you never really stop loving them. It's loves hidden beast that no one really wants to tell you about. I love this piece. It's honest, and you can feel the heartbreak as you read it, good job :)

[Violet Stone]

Yea, I agree. That was very nicely put :) Thank you very much for the review

[John Preston]

Well you did a very good job with this poem.
I assume your heart is now mended.

[Violet Stone]

Thanks and yes, my heart is fine now although I am still burdened with scar of the past :)

[SmittyJas]

You like walking in the rain drowning in your tears. Over a love that wasn't really real or full of his emotions. He walk the other way and left you in shambles you were probably all shook up with emotions you could not control as he just when on without you as if nothing happened.

best to you on your recovery catch you on the rebound.

[1Disawsum]

good flow, like the rhyming scheme. Imagery was great! Emotions flowed on well with the story as well, dark but a great poem!

[Violet Stone]

Thank you very much. I'm happy you likes the flow and the imagery. I try to get my readers to imagine what I write so I'm happy you found good imagery :)

[Mélania Woolf]

Break ups are harsh but what's even worse is not knowing why, being clueless ...But as long as this someone moved on ,well it's clear he/she did not deserve love from the start !
A Very nicely-worded poem , love it !

[Violet Stone]

Thank you so much. I'm glad you understood it and liked it :)

[Mélania Woolf]

It's a pleasure ! ^^

[Violet Stone]

:3 Hehe lol

[❀Subaru_Nyaa!
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I think it's good but I didn't feel any sadness due to me being a cold hearted person again nor that I never decided to fall in love

[Violet Stone]

The poem was made more to get people to understand the feels of those that are heart broken than to get people to feel sad about it but I'm happy that you thought it was good. I understand the feeling of not wanting to fall in love but I wouldn't be surprised if you changed your mind in the future lol XD

[❀Subaru_Nyaa!❀]

I am not scared to fall in love,I just don't that many girls due to me only knowing one girl