Please touch me... (Demo #007)

Hey, this is so not what all you perverts are thinking! :P There is never any of "That" content in my stories. This is teen because of drinking and tobacco use.

The High Preist spoke to the mass. The High Preist's voice was high and rung through the vast space with chrystal clearity. She serveyed every single face, all two thousand four hundred and eighty one faces. She would hold the eyes of the person for a few seconds, then move on to the next face; her voice never faultering as she looked on.

 

High Preist Lady Violet, the first woman to ever become High Preist of the Valgaavian faith. Her dignified posture and tone, complemented by her desire to improve the way of life for all Valgaavian followers, made her the perfect person to lead the faith.

 

Lady Violet's eyes swept on to me, dressed entirely in black with a equally dark headscarf hiding my hair. She faultered in her speech, her blue eyes filling with shock and dismay. Immediately I checked my headscarf; not a single hair was showing. I wondered if she had recognised me some other way, but as the people became unnerved Lady Violet hastily began to read the teachings.

 

She spoke of the thing's that Valgaav did for mankind, how he gave them so many blessings in life. She spoke of why he deemed man unworthy of living with only good in life, so he corrupted mankind. She spoke of how Valgaav determined who was granted access into the nothingness of Valgaav's afterlife. She explained how the nothingness was his final blessing, to free us from the corrution of life.

 

I listened intentivly, absorbing her words and speaking then silently to myself. Everything she said made sense to me- made sense to the two-thousand some odd people here. And then there were many more outside; still more were watching from their homes, listening just as closely as I was.

 

Lady Violet talked for a long time. I had come right here after lunch today, but it was dark by the time she finished. It didn't happen often that the High Priest gave the speeches but when Violet did, they usually were longer than this one. After she stopped, and took a long drink from a dark glass bottle, she signaled that the gathered could leave. As I rose, she stared directly at me. Her head tilted in a way that meant 'follow me'.

 

Once in the dark chamber at the back of the cathedral, she shut the door and turned to me. "How dare you show your face after what you did to me!" She shouted, her voice hard and fueled with anger.

 

"What I did before you became High Preist? If I remember correctly, your responce was 'Please touch me...' " I said calmly.

 

"You lied to me! You did so much evil to me; I still have nightmares about that night!"

 

"Calm down. Would you like a drink? Hey, am I allowed to smoke back here?" I reached up and pulled off my headscarf, revealing my electric-blue hair. 

 

"This is a church." I pulled a cigar out of my pocket and light up. I pulled two glasses out of my other pocket, two very expensive bottles of aged wine. I poped one open easily.

 

"Violet, you need a drink. Here," I handed the light green glass to her. She took the drink and downed the entire thing in a few gulps.

 

"Thank you."

 

I blew a puff of smoke. "Don't mention it."

 

"Hey?" Lady Violet asked, her voice soft and her face red. I made a sound to let her now i heard her whispery voice. "Look at me?"

 

I turned to look at her fully. She stepped closer to me and looked yearningly at me. "Please.... touch me again..."

 

I lifted my right hand and placed it upon her forehead. I gave her what she was seeking...

Author's Note

pardon spelling a grammer please...

Reviews

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

Second sentence. Just substitute "The High Priest*" For She.
It's spelled crystal, and clarity (:
Surveyed
Leave out faces.
Faltering*
Complimented*
Recognized*
Things does not need an apostrophe
"corruption of life" I believe that was a typo.
intently?
response

I THINK that's all the spelling errors I saw. Haha, I'm such a nazi when it comes to those things.
I think you need to get your writing program back up because you need some help.
Over-all it's a good story, tho you do leave us off at a cliff-hanger (which I hate btw)
But other than that good. Keep up with this one. You shouldn't use so many substitute names in this one (i.e High Priest, Violet) Just pick one and stick with it. It'd be easier on the person reading.

(:
-Marie-
P.S. Told you I'd get to it, and two you should add Parker :P

[Savior knowmore]

Ooops! I forgot to put the pronounciation part! Its pronounced vale-gAv-ian. Its based off the character "Valgaav" from the anime/manga THE SLAYERS

[ken burke]

Amazing story but honestly I had trouble reading it cause of the words like valgaavian