Darkness

Eyes of death,
lips of steel.
A dark promise with your every breath,
why can't you be real?

Reviews

[Caradoc]

"Oh but I am..."

Just kidding. :)

I love this one. It's so poignant and dark. The narrator could be speaking to a demon, a vampire, or even Death itself. Or better yet, a lover known only in the recesses of their mind, hidden in the repository of dreams. Fleeting and vivid and forbidden and oh so delicious.

You're a woman of passion, Dew, and it always manages to peak through into whatever you write.

-Caradoc

[blueeyeddevel]

Simple and powerful.

[LivingDeath]

Short yet powerful. The hardest poems to do in my mind and you pulled it off so perfectly. Very good poem.
~LivingDeath

[Black]

Wow it''s nice
short but more emotion than you could imagine
keep on writing!

[Linear]

2nd time.

We all walk inside our own reality, It's only when we interact with others that a true framework is formed. :0). Sorry not as good as my first review, oh well

[K.C. Zbryk]

i like it. Very well crafted, and to the point.