Whispers in the Rain

I am the whispering rain,


I am the eyes that see your pain.


This light that burns so bright,


Dies in your mind of ever lasting night.


Forever love seems to gain,


In wonton abyss forever slain.


This world a brilliant hue,


falls dead before you.


Water runs like tears of joy,


Fires burn cunning and coy.


I walk this path of an irrelevant fact,


Watch each dead end never turning back.


Light fades forever lost,


sell your soul for any cost.


breath in this majestic pain,


For I follow forever as this whispering rain

Reviews

[Caradoc]

How have I never read this one before? This poem is awesome. I love the rhyming and the words you chose. You always have the most interesting word choice.

Bravo. Another instant fave.

-Cara

[Arsh]

"Forever love seems to gain, In wonton abyss forever slain.
This world a brilliant hue, falls dead before you."

Beautiful lines, ending's touchable either. I think, you've been writing for long n yeah, your really good at writing.
Stay Awesome!

[Dewella~Vintella]

Thanks, this is the first poem I ever wrote, so I am glad you enjoyed it.

[Arsh]

My pleasure, You meant....this's the day when you start writing poem??

[Dewella~Vintella]

No I actually wrote this years ago. Around 2009 I believe.

[Arsh]

Really? That's very surprising cus, am glad I got an opportunity to read this beautiful piece in 2014!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Your rhyme scheme... is prevalent throughout this write... and the structure you use with the beginning and ending wrap this sequel:

I am the whispering rain,
I am the eyes that see your pain.

breath in this majestic pain,
For I follow forever as this whispering rain

Everything else just fills in...

[Dewella~Vintella]

Thank you I am glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for stopping in and reviewing

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I had to look back...this was an older review of mine...you're welcome...

[Fairy Willow]

Love this! I like the rhythm, content, vivid imagery that dashes to life. Great piece. :)

[whispereversolightly]

Emotions run deep in this. Like the rhyme scheme and wonderful flow.