Sane Inside Insanity

Introduction to the insanity ward hahaha XD

Come one, come all, to this new place,

Just plaster a fake smile onto your face.

Look around and don't be a stranger,

Act like your life isn't in danger.

Grab a chair and come listen,

Try not to let people see your tears glisten.

We have these nice padded walls here,

And everyone understands you crystal clear.

Go ahead and walk around,

And if you want, you can fall screaming to the ground.

People will not stop and stare,

Because life here is completely fair.

Your wrists are bleeding? That's too bad.

Your best friend died? That's so sad.

We will listen to you no matter what.

We can open your mind that you have shut.

See that girl? Her heart was filled with a lot of strife,

So then she decided to pick up the knife.

Turned her bathtub into a pool of red,

But it's okay, because we are in her head.

We dug around and pulled out what we could,

Then stood her upright and called it good.

Or see that guy? Standing in the corner?

His tale might not be good if you're a mourner.

He had this feeling that was under his skin,

So he decided to go ahead and commit a huge sin.

Pulled a gun and fired one shot,

Knowing that Hell would be where he rot.

But his plan failed once again,

By the horrid act of his best friend.

Now he's here, trying to hide,

We think he's just here for the ride.

But people like this are completely fine,

And this is where these people tend to shine.

The poeple here are not crazies,

They just talk to themselves and pick daises.

You can hear a scream? Pay it no heed,

Let them let it out, it's what they need.

You heard a weird thump, is that what you said?

Oh, it's okay, that guy is just hitting his head.

And if you get cold we can give you a great jacket,

But if you wear it, try not to make a racket.

Go ahead and hold yourself tight,

Because you will probably stay like that all night.

In this building is where I would want to be,

If you were here then you'd definitely agree.

Nice white jackets and walls soft to the touch,

To get in here, it doesn't take much.

So, you, sitting out there and looking in,

Would you like to give this place a spin?

Or you could just sit there in vanity,

While poeple in here are sane inside insanity.

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Wow.... this is amazing! Possibly one of the best poems I've read in a long while. Possibly the best poem I've read on this site. I adored the nonchalant welcoming guide tone to this poem. It was so casual and brushed off every little thing that people consider so serious and disturbing to be nothing out of the ordinary. It was normal and natural and didn't need to be brought into attention. The rhyme and the rhythm was a wonderful addition to the poem and the tone and the atmosphere... everything is so well put together... it's brilliant. I'm beside myself with respect for you in writing this poem. The positive, nonchalant tones is just... brilliant. Give this place a spin, hell with this introduction to the place I wouldn't hesitate. It's so calm and (again I use this word) nonchalant that it would disturb so many people in society because it goes against all norms and creates its own norm that is within the realm of insanity.... I adore this poem. Seriously. It's the best.

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Poizon Riddle,

Or Bethany, I heard this poem was amazing, you didn't disappoint. I would like to have my own room of white, with a matching jacket. Would make life so much easier. Well done.

Regards,

Matthew

[silentsmiles]

that was amazing

[Numb]

Smart, very smart. Well, more like an intriguing topic choice we have here. I loved the narration, and I loved the description of... well, everything. It had such depth, and had an air of wisdom in it. Intelligence, that comes with many years of experience.
Likes others have said, you described what an asylum looked to a person on the outside, then you described the inside; what really happens to the people confined within the walls.
Wonderful, wonderful work.

~N~

[Elvina CZq]

This poem is more just brilliant and clever. You may have described what an asylum looks like physically, but you've expressed what's contain inside the insanity. I agreed and truly believe that people in there are simply sane inside their insanity. I also like how you write it in a way that as if an introduction or a brochure to invite anyone who is interested to stay in there. I really love this poem!

[Elwina]

Beth, this poem is amazing. I love the way you wrote it like a story being told + how life there seems so simple and darkness seems so easily accepted, so much that this place looks like being the safest place on earth. Thank you so much for this piece !

[TheAdventOf]

Not easy to write about for sure, but you definitely nailed it! The wording keeps it simple, despite the subject matter, and you did a wonderful job of really guiding the reader through the ideas that you were having. Awesome!

[Melissa]

Wow! Brutal, yet honest to the core. It's a maze of sane insanity. Great work here. This isn't an easy subject to write about in a poetic manner, yet you have succeeded.

[Elizabeth]

I feel like I would belong in this place. I often want to fall to the ground screaming hahah. I have a major interest in asylums, and this is a rather comical (yet vaguely dark) description of them. Interesting piece :)

[itsjustme]

wow the whole poem was so sick and yet compelling. i was a llittle skeptical whe i first started but quickly it drew my interest. the end line was powerful and made you think. great write! 100%

[Marximilien]

Whoah! This is so cool! I found it really funny and great. The message was easily conveyed, so I liked it a lot. The words were simple but they totally have an appeal. I really felt like I was in the place you were talking about. The whole scene was well-described. The rhyming was definitely good. As I read every line, I then fully understood the previous ones. I love the first line where you... like welcome people and persuade them to come in your world. THIS IS HELLISHLY AWESOME.