Rebirth

 

Serenity found by destruction,

A peace at long last found,

A world full of seduction,

Has made it's final sound.

 

So walk with me, my friend,

Along this shattered dawn,

I find peace in the end,

No longer a lowly pawn.

 

We'll visit it all,

Uninhibited by chains,

Let's break our fall,

This revolution drains.

 

I'll take you anywhere,

 On this burnt Earth,

We'll be there,

For it's new birth.

 

It's a new day,

A second chance,

We're in the fray,

Save the first dance.

 

Renew the tattered womb,

The scars of our entrance,

This place is now our tomb,

Finally we're recieving our penance.

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Very nicely written. I loved the opening and the rhyme. Again, you're very good at portraying imagery and I loved that you threw some grotesque imagery of a tattered womb in there. Nicely done. However, the tone seemed to... not die but it became a little dull in comparison to the rest of the poem in stanzas 3, 4 and 5. It gives the poem it's... I don't want to say plot but it's progress and meaning but it seems to be lacking something that the other three stanzas have. It picked right up with the tattered womb though and you ended it very well! Great poem!

[Elvina CZq]

Such a refreshing poem to read. This poem gives me an insight that behind every negativity, there's always the positivity. Just as when there's darkness, there's always the light penetrating through. Very fine write. Simply wonderful :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem left me with a strange feel of peace. After we lose the past and walk on a new road of rebirth. I love your description and detail. Ending was very good. Thank you.
Coyote