Broken Natural

I still want to hide, just not from you.

Broken Natural

I am left still, and I am a bit far along, due any day now for an attack of my mind. I can understand, why I am playing--through images not to like. If I can recall, such a tale; I’d say…blame it on my inactivity. I can relay it to past, and out springs much, ill favored.

 

I will let it all rise, and fall as it wills for me to feel, when I understand my emotions, that’ll just be the day. So carry me down stream, downwind, and faster than I could ever want; you open my box and unravel a sensitive bit, I rather keep away--except from you. All but you; I want to stay upon a cloud, but not suffer the rain.

 

I will shed with the downpour some time. I've developed a secret disliking, though I need it so. Out-letting, breaking me down, I need to be and feel--just feel, a little broken sometimes. Why refuse it? To be sad or worried is one thing, but to have lived as if never having felt such a thing? I may be a sane man, but denial is a game I just keep playing at.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Sophy Freebirds]

This piece now worked wonder for me.It voiced out my thoughts.It is like falling in thorns of life and.bleeding.A craving that i need to be me and feel broken. You just poured down your heart to it.Living in the clouds but not wanting the rain-that was just a elegant way to explain your situation. It ends with a killer line.kudos indeed to you. I have been absent lately but i come back for ones i care :) Keep writing

~Sophy

[Nyu]

I'll miss you my friend. Be in the happiest, warmest space wherever you decide to go. Grow and grow, and believe in yourself...never settle for a dull life. I know you can make your dreams come true, never quit being the dreamer that I knew you as. Never lose the sparkle in your eye of passion for the world around you.

~~a sad but hopeful and encouraging--Goodbye!!!

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Fascinating mate...the feeling is intense and touched right at the heart...great work

[V. P. Trujillo]

Thanks a lot.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

I thought it was about nature
and now I see it is you
Wow very nicely put I love how this was written
BRAVO!



Very powerful write and raw emotions
flow very well and easy to understand.



I loved the second stanza's lines here.


I will let it all rise, and fall as it wills for me to feel, when I understand my emotions, that’ll just be the day. So carry me down stream, downwind, and faster than I could ever want; you open my box and unravel a sensitive bit, I rather keep away--except from you. All but you; I want to stay upon a cloud, but not suffer the rain.


Music goes great with this piece thank you
for sharing this wonderful work.


Take care Benita/ Kindred poet

[V. P. Trujillo]

Thank you for the great review, Benita. I really appreciate it.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're welcome. :)

[misha]

I love the way you wrote this. Each line is powerful. Great job!

[V. P. Trujillo]

Thank you, misha.

[misha]

You are welcome :-)