I keep chasing, and you are gone. Never staying; what am I to do
but follow? Deep in a subconscious mind, I lost your heart, and I feel so hard
to find it. I am tired of having this
reality elucidate the blurry vision of a waking life; I envision you in my
arms, I want to make it so, so I search all my days, across channels of
differing worlds, and I am alone.
I want to be wrong, but how can I refuse a dream--one right thus
far? I can hold onto you and envision a better happening, though will it be an
illusion or that sweet side to an otherwise bitter truth? I will not give up,
not my part--not wholly let go of an amazing person whom I believe, is
something to me as another has not been. I want you to stay, I am going to
stay. No so-long goodbyes, no more.
Will I ever learn to listen to me? Will I ever learn to fight me?
For all the things I rather have been; the beauties I once had
seen, and cherished in wake and dream.
In life's long run we chase ourselves.. the ever haunting questions - who am i?? What i can be?? What is my worth??... Your poem is deeply psycho- analytical in nature.Diving into the depths of your wisdom you have found this "no more so long goodbye". You are not gonna let yourself go anymore. I like the optimistic optimistic note of the poem."will i ever listen to me??""will i ever learn to fight me".. - these rhetorical questions reflect your mindset of a fighting instinct.The attitude of "live like everyday is your last"... take everything from life give back nothing. Keep writing amigo.
~Sophy
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10 Years Ago
You keep picturing me as a fighter. I both like, and dislike this. I find myself so hard in a strugg.. read moreYou keep picturing me as a fighter. I both like, and dislike this. I find myself so hard in a struggle, between fighter and peacemaker. Many occasions I believe at the wrong times--do I draw on these energies. I am not sure what I am, though I guess I am just looking for it to be more clear-cut than it actually is.
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Fight against the injustice and ,make peace for justice. Yep there are times you will be in dilemma... read moreFight against the injustice and ,make peace for justice. Yep there are times you will be in dilemma. But listen to your heart.Follow it ;) haww if you dislike it.. zippppp!! I won't tell it anymore.
Beautiful, and so romantic.
Really seems like you love this girl.
Love always makes for the best of poems.
Really romantic and deep, very well done. Keep on writing :)
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10 Years Ago
Thank you, I am glad to hear this, and I quite agree w/love being a big inspirational force in poetr.. read moreThank you, I am glad to hear this, and I quite agree w/love being a big inspirational force in poetry.
In life's long run we chase ourselves.. the ever haunting questions - who am i?? What i can be?? What is my worth??... Your poem is deeply psycho- analytical in nature.Diving into the depths of your wisdom you have found this "no more so long goodbye". You are not gonna let yourself go anymore. I like the optimistic optimistic note of the poem."will i ever listen to me??""will i ever learn to fight me".. - these rhetorical questions reflect your mindset of a fighting instinct.The attitude of "live like everyday is your last"... take everything from life give back nothing. Keep writing amigo.
~Sophy
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
You keep picturing me as a fighter. I both like, and dislike this. I find myself so hard in a strugg.. read moreYou keep picturing me as a fighter. I both like, and dislike this. I find myself so hard in a struggle, between fighter and peacemaker. Many occasions I believe at the wrong times--do I draw on these energies. I am not sure what I am, though I guess I am just looking for it to be more clear-cut than it actually is.
10 Years Ago
Fight against the injustice and ,make peace for justice. Yep there are times you will be in dilemma... read moreFight against the injustice and ,make peace for justice. Yep there are times you will be in dilemma. But listen to your heart.Follow it ;) haww if you dislike it.. zippppp!! I won't tell it anymore.
I understand this feeling. Is this about you? I have these feelings a lot and I can't stand them. I want to learn to listen to myself before I make a stupid mistake.
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10 Years Ago
Yeah, it is about me.
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Aww. Are you still stuck?
10 Years Ago
No. It is hard to be stuck, in a real sense, I think it is impossible now that I think about it.
10 Years Ago
You're probably right. I love the song by the way. Who is it?
Nice poem^_^ after all u know there is something said about dreams and reality.
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This dream, speaks so much of the intense feelings, that seem to happen, when certain persons, leave in certain moments, It awakens our souls, on a way, so we are missing strongly what "is" gone. I truly believe with all mind-strength one can achieve or have, and a with a mingle of concious, you can steer the dream into the right direction. It's "all you" who has to do this, and you shall ;) without hurt, insecurity, or even anger, but just with a empty and keen mind and soul. You shall see, you're not even "tired" anymore, for this is the wrong energy, (as you say in your ending). When tired is there, there has been too much conciousness, too much thought. I know, no so-long goodbye's are coming, and will change just into "bye's" for bye's are better, with bye's people return... people stay. This person, you speak of, needs to be cherished, and needs to be always cupped in your handpalms, like your hands are her protection, but with chinks of your fingers, for her to breathe, watch the world, and to find her peace and "alone" time when she escapes ;) Just a stunning piece of work yet again Bro. I believe there is much to talk about when we have another chance. This one was right from your heart. Beautiful...
- Sis
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You would make an impeccable Jungian Analyst, my dear Sis. You are superbly gifted with insights. I .. read moreYou would make an impeccable Jungian Analyst, my dear Sis. You are superbly gifted with insights. I love it so.
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Aw, and whoaaa ;) that would be too much ^^ my dearest Bro. Thanks for the kind words though. I'm gl.. read moreAw, and whoaaa ;) that would be too much ^^ my dearest Bro. Thanks for the kind words though. I'm glad I was here, as always. -x-
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