Within Remembering

Let it roll between your finger tips, and shine from point to point.

Physicality Affects

I twirl these beads around my wrist

Red to the primal survival

Yellow to my physical will

Green entangles the succinct heart

                      

Imbue of me with energy

Vibratory frequencies, I

Take a part of you, and all the

Pathways through emergence of heart

 

A big black strand, standing way out

Reaching towards control and the

Resilience of this utmost

Real of all dreamt of being hearts

 

Ethereal Manifest

Shone deep to inner gland of mind

Being seen as what there is inside

Ignore the beckoning without

True power, true magic within

 

Imagine it being so, and so

Becoming, it lays a sliver

Of remembering upon your

Most forgotten knowing within

 

There is this thing we believe, the

Reality of which conceived

For truth, it’s nonsense from without

That said, I urge you; go within

Author's Note

These are two Kyrielle, a French form of poem. I did not stick with a very clear rhyming scheme, however.

Reviews

[Michelle N. H.]

You never seize to amaze me. I really like how your words simply make me wonder. It is as though you're saying we are energy, vibratory frequencies interacting with one another. The colors you refer to are of the chakra and the strand may be the cord linking body and spirit, the physical and the ethereal. How very suitable to divide a poem in two for that reason! We find ourselves breathing in a world where what is real is concealed, nevertheless there is a splinter in our mind, an inner knowing which tells us there is more to existence than we are lead to believe. Go within to go beyond, to know yourself and whatever truth you may be seeking. This whole piece could be the portrayal of a meditation also.. To me, this is a tremendous write!

[V. P. Trujillo]

Thank you very much, Michelle! You are exactly right, as is all interpretations, however I am glad you see and understand as I do. It's because humanity, our souls in these vessels, we are waking up now, from a long slumber. =]

[Michelle N. H.]

I have the exact same conviction :)

[icelandicblue]

I like both of these. The first one for its metaphysical musings and your use of color as energy. For some reason it reminded me of the medieval four humors which were not depicted beautifully as yours are yet they still spoke to the energy that coursed through us spirituality, physically and into our minds. The second poem spoke of truth and the treasure chest where one should look lies in each of us. Look inward and the truth shall reveal itself. I find that to be very heady advice. Thanks for the read.

[V. P. Trujillo]

You are most welcome, and I thank you for this beautiful review. =)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

rhyme is certainly not necessary..there is a rhythm to your voice and the lines have much emotion enjambed within...

i like the use of color in the first piece...the second piece i like because of the plea that we go within...to really find the truth..it is within us, not without...

we are immersed in the introspection here. nicely done.

jacob

[V. P. Trujillo]

Thank you for your review, jacob. I find this most pleasant. =)

[V. P. Trujillo]

I could not review it , I was speechless for days ... at least it felt so... had to chew on it like heavenly bubble gum first.... so I did not review till the taste was old, and I spit it out, to translate it in words....

Now I do, I was sucked in your way of rambling, like a vacuum cleaner, picks up a ladybug .... no air, no breath, no nothing , all at the same time.
Far gone by these channeling tunnels, sucked into the paradox of being .... two-mirrored... the true reality... you write even better than before. You now dances like words sing through your soul, and you got your big sister, in places that are not to describe. (orange and trees). Be proud of your self...

You grow, litteraly and metaphorically... day by day, and you are getting better, I think and hope you grow past me, as Jack and the Beanstalk ... living, high, prosperous, sweet, rich in mind, and full of passion.... then I laugh as I laugh now (had some errors in this review, left them), I know you love me as I am, but I hate me as I am, with errors lol....!! (perfectionista) like no other now ... (me) I love you spiritual power, your determination, the third unit, through red, yellow, green, orange which is formed, and a tree growing from small seeds, fed by rain, and so on and forth ... to feel at home... and "grounded"

I agree with lovely Michelle, she did so nicely worded, how you write .... there is "energy" in everything, and nothing around us, inside the quiet eye of the wind light the power of the storm... only true listeners can hear/feel...

You're a true talent Bro.... If you open your gates, only light shines..... through.

- Elisa xo

[V. P. Trujillo]

Jeez, Sis. This really means a lot, your words seriously do me honor. I am thankful for you, very thankful.

Had some errors, yuckie... ;) had left them, in before you could read... no thanks, keep penning, I'm ever so proud, and love you muchly! x

[Alice Aries]

I love these, particularly 'Ethereal Manifest'. You have a very alluring way of words; they craft an image that resonates. Very nice, I'll be reading more.

[V. P. Trujillo]

Thank you, Alice Aries. x)

By the way, are you an Aries?

[Alice Aries]

Alas, I am a Gemini :)

[V. P. Trujillo]

I am an Aries.

[Laminators Dubai]

Wow...that was different v.p. I liked both as I think its circling the material and mental.
Universal and philosophically done.
Must be amazing to write as to read.
Thanks for sharing^^

[V. P. Trujillo]

Thanks very much, glitch.