The Ballad of Oakvale

A gorgeous town, peaceful, serene. Surrounded by Oaks.

Do you know of the beauty that was Oakvale?

Tall, strong branches, ever reaching,

Fought to no avail,

Simple folk lay bleeding.

 

A Lad of young with many a task,

His Sister of old, at least her soul,

Was her day of birth, and a present was meant,

Off lad went, gathering coin for gift.

 

Speaking with ‘this’ man, and ‘that’ man,

Lad found himself a means

For monetary gain, that was the plan,

Though young, his heart had many greed’s.

 

Causing havoc as it suited,

Provoking a smile, and laughter,

It was by intolerant locals was Lad then booted,

Not quite what he was after.

 

Mind back to his sibling, he fell in line

Had enough coin for his Sister’s surprise

Chocolate in a box, he felt was right

He left and dashed to Sis… just in time.

 

A bloody gross sight was seen

Eyes widened as what was never there

Leaked through to heart, a scene

Of the likes none should be a part.

 

The murderer of his kin turned gaze

Saw the child, and with hand raised

Bearing a sharpened blade

It was then he alone was saved, by a glowing man.

 

Do you know of the beauty that was Oakvale?

Tall, strong branches, ever reaching

Fought to no avail,

Simple folk lay bleeding.

Author's Note

All credits for this gorgeous music go to Adrian von Ziegler. A brilliantly genuine composer.

Reviews

[olla]

one should always begin at the beginning.. this is very good.. I had to go to youtube to find the music.. but it was certainly worth it.. a story of tragedy intruding into the innocence of youth.. heard far too often.. I wonder sometimes if we have old souls to begin with or if they are really prematurely aged by the hostile environments we seem to be born into.. eyes that see too much reflect ancient truths..

[V. P. Trujillo]

Thank you very much! You pose a great question, one I've actually never pondered. I am unsure of the answer, other than perhaps that it depends on the individual.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I like the picture above the poem, as well as the imagery in the poem itself. It seems like a nice medieval time or so. This poem has a great story within it but one that becomes sad. I really like the togetherness of the siblings in this, the way he wants to surprise her. The Celtic Music is fitting for the imagery and story as well. Nicely put together, enjoyed.

[V. P. Trujillo]

Thank you! =-]

I am glad you enjoyed it, and provided feedback.

[Lydia Shutter]

You are quite a storyteller! The rhyming is flawless and the imagery is stunning. Using the first stanza to end your poem was a very effective tool. A very sad story you told here, but it was well written. Lydi**

[V. P. Trujillo]

Well, every sad start should have it's happy ending, eh? We shall see, thank you once again.

[Heather]

i love the story within this poem it causes the beauty of it to shine, the harshness of some of the words made the poem seem more realistic, made the reader connect to the poem and its path and enjoy all that it had to offer, lovely to read!, great job!! :)

[V. P. Trujillo]

I am really glad you enjoyed it, and described it so.

Many thanks!

[Heather]

no problem! it was truly lovely to read thank you for sharing this piece, you are very welcome!! :D

[Michelle N. H.]

There's nothing quite like a fine story told in rhyme. I like how you chose to package your poem altogether by beginning and concluding with the very same stanza. Loved the read :)

[V. P. Trujillo]

Thank you, that's how a Ballad is formed really. It was actually my first go at it, I hoped I wouldn't disappoint.

[Michelle N. H.]

Aw, I think it's brilliant, especially for a "first go at it".

[Laminators Dubai]

wow!
i was reading and suddenly the music touched...boom...that was really an impressive way.
im feeling lucky about this.
god bless you for this beautiful gift^^

[V. P. Trujillo]

Thank you very much!

[Kenaz]

Nice music, epic tale. A bit of a grisly history this town now has. Thanks for sharing

[V. P. Trujillo]

Thank you for reviewing. Glad you enjoyed it.

[V. P. Trujillo]

My dear,

I'm in love with your piece! thank you so much for sharing this...
It's the perfect tale, in your poetry with this fantastic ancient feeling...
And a feeling of family ;)

it were robust and cruel times for those who saw more than their years young ... ;)

- Elisita

[V. P. Trujillo]

Indeed, and very well put. Thank you.

You're welcome, p.s. many thanks, for loving the music of my favorite Adrian von Ziegler too... ♫ I so love him! he's too brilliant for his age... :)

[V. P. Trujillo]

He is, but then so are many these days it seems. The youth of today are old souls.

I think there is a difference with the all "round" old souls though ;) mostly they are rare... :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. The title , the poem and the music were marvelous...Bravo

[V. P. Trujillo]

Thank you very much! x)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)...................