Berlin - Short in second-person

Just a little tidbit of writing I come about with. Reviews?

It’s a crisp autumn afternoon Berlin, Germany. The glass doors in the white pillar mansion are open, and the white cloths that regularly shade the windows are blowing inside the house softly. You’re lying across an elegant, red velvet leisure seat with intricate designs winding around the sides. A couple servants are dappled across the wide open room, awaiting any needs that arise. With your eyes closed, you lift up your wine glass. It’s filled with red wine almost immediately, and you bring the glass up to your lips slowly. As you sip, your matte red lipstick lightly stains around the rim of the glass. With your free hand, you snap your fingers once. The silence is then filled with Bach playing quietly.

            Not more than a second or two after this, footsteps are heard on the stairs that are slightly winding, just a few feet in front of you.  They sound certain. You open your smoky-black eyes. Above, you see Victor descending with a black tux on. His jet-black hair is slicked back, yet a few strands remained wild at the ends. He looks up, and his sea-foam green eyes catch yours.

            “Lovely…” he whispers, his eyebrows raised, and paces himself down the steps a tad quicker. When he reaches the bottom, his hair is slightly frazzled and he runs his hands through it.

            You smile, sit up, set your glass down, and adjust your elegant, blood red dress. As he approaches you, he swallows, allowing his eyes to take you all in. “A-alright well I suppose it’s time to lea-“

            You interrupt him with a kiss. It’s a light peck, making sure your lipstick doesn't ruin. He leans in desperate for more, but you just nod at him and he takes your hand into his.

            He guides you to the door, and helps you into your fur coat. You two then leave, out to enjoy your time at an important dinner party in town.

Author's Note

This is in second person

Reviews

[SnakeEaterCorpo]

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