Broken Chords Of My Heart

An Attempt to write Broken Heart Poetry :P

Relation was made to de-escalated

Then why you embroiled me in

I hope you did that to share your anguish

Indeed it worked fine

Now you're happy in your life

You left me weeping, weakened & spited

Strings of my heart you touched & cozen

In relationship which we partook

I hope to call you back

But it’s already tardy

You went with my felicitousness

I got all your anguish in retort.

 

Grab a plate and throw it on the ground

- Okay, done.

Did it break?

-Yes.

Now say sorry to it.

- Sorry.

Did it go back to the way it was before?

- No

Do you understand?

Author's Note

Please Improve if you get some mistakes ;) its just my attempt :)

Reviews

[Shivam Murari]

I see immense amount of poet-ism overflowing from this poem. And that is saying something, when only 2 months ago, I read a poem of yours which made you sound novice.

How well you have used modern poetry and lived it! Remarkable indeed! Congratulations!

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much Shivam, Yes WC really helped me to work on my weaker part where I use to feel difficulty while expressing myself. Now, i'm still learning more and more.
Thank you and Smilespm to always help me :)
- Singh ;)

[Shivam Murari]

Indeed. This place has improved my writing skills a lot, either!

[Vikrantsingh]

;) We learned many things and still under process to get more to share in coming days :)
- Singh :)

[Shivam Murari]

Many indeed : )

[ganga ramesh]

Did I click the link to Broken Chords Of My heart?
Okay, done!

Did I read it?
Yup, ofcourse!

Did I like it?
NOOOOOOO

Didn't I love it?
I sure do LOVEEEEE IT !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


very nice in the selection of ur thoughts , arranging ur ideas and those pics...man ur a blowing me off once again! That is seriously a great piece! :)


Lovingly,
Ganga Ramesh

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[ganga ramesh]

always welcome:)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Sad and beautiful at the same time.. I think you've captured the melancholy of the situation well and the plate analogy is always one of my favorites (I even wrote about it once).. great job dear.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[Vani Jalagar]

Awful sensation I can experience and see in this writing. Chords that were broken will vibrate once more with a fine frequency :)
writing is worthwhile if it makes a reader to involve in the characters and feel it completely. look at me now,Broken Chords Of My Heart .....yea I'm involved in it......

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[smilempsn]

Sometimes some Chords should be left untouched...
there are time for some chords to bring in there lovely music but are for small span...
And after that, it just hurts to touch those chords..

Broken...Untouched...but still they have a special place in our heart :)
nice and sad piece VikrantSingh Parmar :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Nice attempt to sad poetry, Singh. I like this one. Keep it up. Sometimes we have to explore our own capacity...and you did it right, my friend.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[tuvi]

Hey Vik,

I had a read though it before it got published here , firstly sorry I couldn't comment secondly this one is heartfelt ....dono if its hitting my mood swing and sounds too appropriate or I've really become the sad genere kinds ...
loved the pictures used ..
loved this bit :
" Strings of my heart you touched & cozen
In relationship which we partook
I hope to call you back
But it’s already tardy
You went with my felicitousness
I got all your anguish in retort. "

Good write up .... yet its so not u , your poetry used to connect me to you but this one dint do that bit of work .

Tuvi

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[Zero_Edge88]

No offense Singh but I've seen the broken glass analogy and in fact it was told to us by my Philosophy teacher I believe in high school. It is one of those profound lectures he was teaching us that day well all his lectures are profound and amazing but yeah. It is one that we're never able to fix as to tell that tree we chop down to grow again 150 years in a day these acts we find ourselves not only mortifying but also distressing. Now comes my other review:

For are we not the broken string of our heart that which we had strummed so much that it not only lost rhythm but a place in our life. As to know that we are not being just tugged we are also reminded that here in reality we face an obstacle known as acceptance! Knowing that we are unprepared there is no solid backup to what we would consider in finding another love. For what love we had to someone so deep and so imperceptible to others this love is one kindled yet unbridled like the flames to our soul!

Shine on my friend and have a beautiful weekend :)
Zero :)

PS: let me know what you think should you get the copy of the book ;)

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[Zero_Edge88]

You are very welcome my friend and it is always a pleasure to visit your house of thoughts :)
~ Zero :)

[Vikrantsingh]

^ - ^ :) Sorry had more than 50+ reviews this weekend :/ I really don't have clue how this all happened :D

[Zero_Edge88]

:) It is not your fault! It's life and hey if you have that much you were busy yourself. I took a break this weekend and now I got to get back on the writing grind haha. :D You did get my message right? :P

[Vikrantsingh]

Yes but you're charging it high :P

[Zero_Edge88]

Ahh I see, it's paperback my friend :P and even then it's a lot of pages, it's 162 pages to be exact lol! :P

[Vikrantsingh]

Just kidding :) I would really try to buy this one without any problem :)

[Prritiy]

Strings of my heart you touched & cozen
In relationship which we partook
I hope to call you back
But it’s already tardy
You went with my felicitousness
I got all your anguish in retort.

This is a write which has deep pain in it, comes as a surprise from your pen. You have written in nicely and it has an impact.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[Prritiy]

you are welcome.

[Frieda P]

Wow Singh, this is sad coming from your pen, deep, dark & foreboding, love the ending....never thought of it that way when I throw dishes! Bravo my friend....great read!

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Good attempt for a first time. Keep up the good work.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much for reviewing and visiting my page :)
- Singh :)