Broken Chords Of My Heart

An Attempt to write Broken Heart Poetry :P

Relation was made to de-escalated

Then why you embroiled me in

I hope you did that to share your anguish

Indeed it worked fine

Now you're happy in your life

You left me weeping, weakened & spited

Strings of my heart you touched & cozen

In relationship which we partook

I hope to call you back

But it’s already tardy

You went with my felicitousness

I got all your anguish in retort.

 

Grab a plate and throw it on the ground

- Okay, done.

Did it break?

-Yes.

Now say sorry to it.

- Sorry.

Did it go back to the way it was before?

- No

Do you understand?

Author's Note

Please Improve if you get some mistakes ;) its just my attempt :)

Reviews

[Shivam Murari]

I see immense amount of poet-ism overflowing from this poem. And that is saying something, when only 2 months ago, I read a poem of yours which made you sound novice.

How well you have used modern poetry and lived it! Remarkable indeed! Congratulations!

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much Shivam, Yes WC really helped me to work on my weaker part where I use to feel difficulty while expressing myself. Now, i'm still learning more and more.
Thank you and Smilespm to always help me :)
- Singh ;)

[Shivam Murari]

Indeed. This place has improved my writing skills a lot, either!

[Vikrantsingh]

;) We learned many things and still under process to get more to share in coming days :)
- Singh :)

[Shivam Murari]

Many indeed : )

[cycy]

Grab a plate and throw it on the ground

- Okay, done.

Did it break?

-Yes.

Now say sorry to it.

- Sorry.

Did it go back to the way it was before?

- No

Do you understand?
wow,thats some really deep and intense stuff right there. totally feel you hey. somethings can just never come undone.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I like the meaning in this and the way you used the plate in the end. Nice write.

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you so much Victoria for your visit and review :) i will check your work sooner and will review few of your poems sooner.

Have fun and stay blessed :)
- Singh :)

[koty bell]

I loved this profound,deep,and made me think. Great write

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks Koty :) I really appreciate your review on my poem :)
- Singh :)

[koty bell]

No problem sir:)this was all around very great:)

[Pallavi Chaturvedi]

Too good Vikrant. I love the selection of the words in the poem and can feel a broken heart in the poem...
Writing of the poem justifies with its theme :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Wow! Thanks Pallavi i'm glad to see your words on my poem. I'm pleased and happy you enjoyed it :)read moreWow! Thanks Pallavi i'm glad to see your words on my poem. I'm pleased and happy you enjoyed it :)
- Singh :)

[Pallavi Chaturvedi]

you are welcome Mr. Singh :)

[Ankita]

No Sir, there's no mistake at all. Do you think there can be? And even if there is, I'm sure it's too small or nothing compared to your wonderful piece. Leaves me overwhelmed. Well, your poems always make me so. And of course, I specially like the way you have described the breaking of one's self and that no 'sorry' can ever mend it. Your presentation of the poem is catchy and attractive. Keep writing. :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks so such a great start with your review by stating no mistake. Please call me vikrant/singh/vik any name you like Ankita, i'm not so big to be addressed with "Sir".
Thank you for sharing your review and views on this poem :)
- Singh :)

[Astro]

Well there are a couple great aspects to your attempt at heartbreak here Singh. I like the line, "You left me weeping, weakened & spited" it is definitely reminiscent of heartbreak. Also, the dialogue and scene you give at the end has a very poignant message that is very clear in your example that a heart that's been broken may never be fixed....may never.

[Vikrantsingh]

Asrto my friend :) thanks for your visit and great review as always, I'm so pleased and encouraged with your words :)
- Singh :)

[Astro]

No problem Singh, keep up the good work.

[Sherlock]

Really good !! loved the conversation poem part !! beautiful meaning
keep writing !
stay blessed
- neha

[Vikrantsingh]

Thanks Neha :) I'm glad you love it :) well i'm poppin and check your poems though soon :)
- Singh :)

[Sherlock]

Cool I have got a lot more to type in

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Breaking the dishes is a great way to vent and release the anguish!...I should try that. ;))
This is exemplifies the breaking of your heart.

"But it’s already tardy

You went with my felicitousness

I got all your anguish in retort.

Grab a plate and throw it on the ground"~ Well done, Singh! ~xoxo~:)

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you Robbie :) - I'm glad to read your review on my poem as always :)
Thanks for visiting :)
- Singh :)

[SyberRose]

You are doing great Singh...enjoyed reading this piece...you might want to replace tardy with late.:)

[Vikrantsingh]

Thank you Rose :) Well i will make that change as you suggested here :)
I'm glad you popped in and reviewed my work :)
- Singh :)